It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built
in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why?
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
In this day, people are so busy with their work that sometimes they do not have enough time to cook a meal for themselves. Thus, personally, I think building new restaurants is essential and plausible because of meeting those people’s needs and creating more jobs for people in these nighbours. I feel this way for these reasons and I will discuss them in the following essay.
Firstly, it is obvious that people nowadays usually work very hard for their income and families. In fact, modern people often have at least two jobs for earning enough money for meeting their fundamental needs in their lives. Many factories or companies pay low salaries for many uneducated people so these people have to look for another job to make enough money to take care of their families. Moreover, many other people while working for companies also work very hard with a lot of projects which make them work overtime. Thus, many modern people do not have enough time to cook a meal so a restaurants helps them do that. Restaurants help people still eat healthy and balanced meals without cooking. My own experience as an intern is a compelling example of this. At that time, I had so many assignments and projects to do that I had to get up early in the morning and stay up late to finish these work. Thus, it is obvious that I did not have enough time to do anything else even making a meal so I often went to the restaurants for eating which helped me a lot that time not only meet my needs but also provide me a lot of energy. Therefore, building restaurants is necessary and useful for people in neighbours.
Secondly, building restaurants helps the unemployment rate decrease a lot. Nowadays, the unemployment rate is increasing more and more by years and years. Many people who leave school do not have any jobs or cannot find a job in their neighbours which makes them find jobs that are far away from their home. To prevent this, the governments should take some actions and building restaurants is a good idea for doing it. A restaurant require many people to serve well for guests. There are at least twenty waiters and ten cheves in a restaurants so building restaurants create many jobs for people in neighbours. For instance, my sister was an unemployed person. She has an excellent university certificate but she could not find any jobs yet. She came to many companies and factories but they were already full. Thus, she had to look for a job outside our neighbours but fortunately, a new restaurant was founded. She applied for a chef in this restaurant and surprisingly, she was successful. If the restaurant had not appeared, it would have taken her a lot of time to go for work.
In conclusio, I support this plan that a restaurant is initiated in my neighbour. This is because it helps my neighbourhoods become comfortable with their eating when they are busy or have undesired work and become unemployed in their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'requires'.
Suggestion: requires
...a good idea for doing it. A restaurant require many people to serve well for guests. T...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a restaurant' or simply 'restaurants'?
Suggestion: a restaurant; restaurants
... least twenty waiters and ten cheves in a restaurants so building restaurants create many job...
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Suggestion:
...uilding restaurants create many jobs for people in neighbours. For instance, my s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, at least, for instance, i feel, i think, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2418.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68604651163 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66545233303 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441860465116 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5178081678 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5555555556 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1111111111 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7037037037 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0898298267484 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372539386689 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042100301214 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0754889756549 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217646855031 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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