Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Universities should require all students to gain some working experience as part-time employees or interns before they can graduate.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days, thousands of students are graduating from colleges and universities. And preparing them for real life has become essential. Some believe that students should gain some experience before graduating. Which I agree with. I firmly believe that students should have some practical jobs before graduating from college for several reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, gaining some experience before graduating will be beneficial for building communication skills and boosting self-esteem. I believe that work will allow students to see the real world and how they should behave in some circumstances. Being in a part-time job or internship will make them close to the work environment and allow them to experience this new world before graduating. I have to admit that my own experience has influenced my opinion on this matter. Before graduating, my university requires a training course in chemical plants for three months. In the beginning, the training was tough. I worked for seven hours daily; however, it was worth it. I have learned how to communicate with other employees and managers. Moreover, this opportunity helped me build my personality and gave me the confidence to work in chemical plants in the future. You can see that universities should provide this opportunity to their students.
Secondly, working as part-time employees or interns might open doors in the future. If the students work hard in their part-time jobs or internships, they might be able to continue in the same company as full-time employees. Furthermore, they could obtain recommendations during their work as part-time employees and have the chance to work in more significant and promising companies. Drawing from my experience, I had the opportunity to work as a full-time process engineer in the same company I trained in after graduating from the university. I worked very hard during my time as a trainee. And the manager there recommended me. You can see that the university could assist students in finding jobs if it requires their students to work before graduating.
In light of the reasons mentioned above, I firmly believe that universities should request training courses before graduating.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, as to, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3137254902 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98173186545 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481792717087 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5009940568 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.4782608696 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5217391304 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.39130434783 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346377130303 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100052371824 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683733072349 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200822360421 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052497304728 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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