Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should require all students to gain some working experience as part-time employees or interns before they can graduate. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The employment rate of college students is decreasing, leading the schools to take various actions to address it. Some universities contend that work experience as a graduation requirement is a feasible way to increase the employment rate; others believe that it is useless for the students. In short, I have a negative view of the work experience and role of graduation requirements.
The argument is based on an inaccurate assumption that the internship could learn the knowledge outside the school and obtain valuable experience in working for an enterprise. However, requiring students to obtain work experience not only defies the original purpose that requires students to have the ability with competence and erudite but also takes a reverse result. For instance, part of some students who want to pursue their career future in the academic field may prepare for a language exam and write a research proposal-a primary means of showing their academic skills, in the summer and winter vacation, the internship will waste their time and affect their application outcome as a whole. Furthermore, the enterprise usually asks for interns and wastes their time doing some insane work. As a consequence, working for the business during the vacation brings students invaluable experience, but ignoring the heterogeneity among the students who have diverse career plans, spending the time on irrelevant things to attain the graduation requirement.
There are many other factors that can make an impact on the employment rate of college students as well. Or rather, the original statement ignores the heterogeneity among the students and focuses solely on ruling the requirement for students to have work experience before they can graduate. For example, some students could have more incentive to pursue an academic career than others. Therefore, they may still get nothing despite internships in the enterprise. Moreover, work experience does not provide a sufficient guarantee for obtaining the job position, simply knowing increases innovative knowledge about the industries, because there are few positions that can be determined by a single factor. To illustrate, the factors considered by the enterprises, such as college GPA, motivation, and social skills, could also be determining the fate of college students for the job offer. Hence, it can be stated that work experience is not the main determinant for the companies to make a job decision. In such cases, the enforcement of this policy will be difficult at best and unfair at worst.
Work experience is a double-edged sword when it comes to enforcement. On one side, the knowledge gained by taking an internship is beneficial in the job interview process. On the other side is an impediment for students to enhance their abilities and develop their interests individually during the winter and summer vacation. Still, at a practical level, however, this policy not only fails to understand the core concept of the work experience but is difficult to implement in the real world. In enforcement, for instance, what should the school do if the students have an attitude of less obedience or even defiance? Hence, work experience, I argue, is thus optional, because it is primarily dissimilar to the career plan among the students and the students have a choice to decide to have an internship or not.
All told, work experience, in my view, has apparent deficiencies in the original statement. That is, taking an internship in school life is not an integral but an optional measure; precisely, instead of requiring students to have an internship, the schools should set up a system that ensures students will successfully have the skills, knowledge, and competence to pursue their career future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in short, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 43.0 8.0752688172 532% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3160.0 1977.66487455 160% => OK
No of words: 599.0 407.700716846 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2754590985 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94716853372 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93270367307 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474123539232 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1008.9 618.680645161 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.1222023605 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.666666667 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9583333333 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.20833333333 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213689187913 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718597390335 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501716980612 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130903756989 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310979298705 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 86.8835125448 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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