Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should require all students to gain some working experience as part-time employees or interns before they can graduate.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The employment rate of college students is decreasing, leading the schools to take various actions to address it. Some institutions contend that making work experience a requirement for graduation is a practical method to boost the employment rate; however, others assert that it is not helpful to students. In short, I don’t think work experience and graduation requirements play a positive role.
The argument is based on the inaccurate premise that an internship could allow students to learn outside of the classroom and obtain essential professional experience. But requiring students to have work experience not only goes against the original intent, which called for students to be capable, competent, and erudite, but also has the opposite effect. For example, while some students who want to pursue academia might study for a language test and write a research proposal as a primary way to demonstrate their academic abilities during the summer and winter vacations, the internship wastes their time and negatively impacts the overall outcome of their application. Additionally, the company frequently requests interns and waste their time by having them perform absurd tasks. Therefore, working for a company during a break gives students useless experience but ignores the diversity among the students who have various professional aspirations, wasting time on pointless activities to meet graduation requirements.
The employment rate of college students can also be influenced by a wide range of other variables. Or, to put it another way, the original statement ignores the diversity of the students and concentrates only on upholding the rule requiring students to gain job experience before graduating. For instance, some students could be more motivated than others to pursue a career in academia. Therefore, despite having the internships at the company, they can still get nothing. Because there are few positions that can be determined by only one factor, work experience does not necessarily provide sufficient assurance for landing the job. Simply knowing more about the sectors can boost one’s innovative expertise, including college GPA, passion, and social skills, which may also be influencing college students’ chances of receiving a job offer. Therefore, it can be said that work experience is not the primary factors considered by employers when filling open positions. In these situations, following this rule will be challenging at best and unfair at worst.
When it comes to enforcement, work experience has two sides. On the plus side, internship-related expertise can be useful during job interviews. On the other hand, there is an impediment that prevents students from advancing their skills and pursuing their interests on a personal level over the winter and summer breaks. However, in practice, this approach not only misunderstands the fundamental idea of work experience but also proves to be challenging to put into practice. What should the school do, for instance, if the children exhibit a lack of compliance or outright defiance? Therefore, I contend that work experience is optional because it is mostly unrelated to the students’ career plans and because they have the option of choosing whether or not to participate in an internship.
All told, I believe the original statement about work experience has flaws. Thus, completing an internship while in school is not a requirement but rather a choice. Specifically, schools should implement systems that guarantee students will successfully possess the skills, knowledge, and competence to pursue their career futures, rather than requiring them to complete an internship.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in short, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 8.0752688172 409% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3117.0 1977.66487455 158% => OK
No of words: 566.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50706713781 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0203876531 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512367491166 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 968.4 618.680645161 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7158672108 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.68 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.64 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226958521211 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685950846835 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385017853215 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131589342553 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0144761279745 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 86.8835125448 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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