Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Nowadays, numerous universities are provided diverse courses such as science, technology, music, sports and so on so as to make their students flourish in career. Yet, some subjects are not obtaining enough fund as compared to other. In the given scenario, it is perceived that sports activity should be granted the equal fund as the library do. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that undoubtedly the benefit that students procure from involving in physical activities are no less than the knowledge they obtain from library. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To commence with, being fit physically is directly related with the student's performance in other subject courses. To be more precsie, if they are indulge in some sort of physical activity, they remain healthy due to which they can have proper focus in their study. Drawing from my own experience, when I was in school, I was active in sport activity. I used to be a part of every games held in my school. This helped me basically in two ways. First, as physical activity involve the whole body movement, it aided me to boost up my stamina. Second, it assisted me to concentrate in my study. My brain used to active and fresh which could be monotonous if expend merely on library reading books all the time. Indeed, this has really helped me to ameliorate in my education. Therefore, the multitude advantage that we attain from physical activity should not be overlooked and school should allocate fund for the enhancement of sport activity.
Secondly, the one who is keen on sport activity can conveniently convert their passion into their career only if they are given enough opportunity to participate in such activities. In addition, school play a vital role in shaping student's future so they should be concerned about their field of interest. As a matter of fact, investing sum merely in library does not ensure student's excellence. To so do, they must identify student's interest then provide sufficient equipment or conduct activity in school to encourage them to flourish further. This way they can achieve their success in the field they are interested in. For instance, if a student is fond of particular game, let us assume football, in such case if a school conduct football game in a regular basis, then this could be a privilege for him. As a result, he could foster his skills even better that he could make his dream come true. Needless to say, this would not be the case if he is confined himself simply in library all the time. Hence, it is highly significant for evry university to invest fund equally in every field so that student attain benefit of it.
All things considered, unquestionably schools are accountable for shaping pupil's future. Thus, they should be concerned to divide fund evenly in respect whether it is for sport activity or library.
Score: Not Evaluated.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ce, technology, music, sports and so on so as to make their students flourish in career....
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Line 2, column 69, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...physically is directly related with the students performance in other subject courses. T...
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Line 2, column 148, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'indulged'.
Suggestion: indulged
...ourses. To be more precsie, if they are indulge in some sort of physical activity, they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in addition, sort of, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2423.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9048582996 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67219435951 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528340080972 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.937135538 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7407407407 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2962962963 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.51851851852 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215383587478 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565329718406 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472401498024 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109166796589 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067577674552 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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