Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Some people believe that universities must give the same amount of money to students’ sport activities as they give to their university libraries, while others do not agree with the statemt. For me, I totally disagree with the statement. I maintain that universities should disburse more money to libraries instead of sports activities, and my reasons are as follows.
To begin with, universities should place an emphasis on students’ convenience. That is, if they gives more money to libraries, students can feel more convenient. To elaborate, if the university spends more money building new libraries, this means that students can have access to more books and articles. In addition, if the university decides to put new printers and computers in the library, students can use these hardware resources in the library to find books or copy pages. As a result, students will feel extremely convenient when they are looking for information and books in the library. However, if the university spend money on students’ sports events, it might make students spend a lot of time and effort helping it to prepare sports events, and most students find these tasks extremely inconvenient.
In addition, universities should care about their reputation, and spending more money on libraries can help them procure a better image. For instance, National Taiwan University allocated 8% of its total budget to decorate its library, so students have a comfortable surroundings to enjoy reading books and articles. Besides, most citizens who visit the library agree that National Taiwan University put a lot of effort into providing students with cozy studying environments. As a result, most residents hold positive views about National Taiwan University’s library policy. Contrarily, my cousin’s university, Hua-Xia Technological University, spent 500 million NT dollars on both its school library as well as a tennis competition, but most Hua-Xia Technological University students complained that there wasn’t a single functioning printer in the library, and the operating systems installed in the library’s computers were Windows XP, which was outmoded for ten years. As a result, most students hold a negative attitude toward their own university, because they insisted that if Hua-Xia University had abundant wherewithal to spend on sports events, why couldn’t that money be used to upgrade hardware facilities in the library? As we can see, spending the equivalent amount of money on students’ sport events and libraries might make a school procure an unfavorable image.
In conclusion, I maintain that the university should give more money to libraries instead of sport activities, considering the fact that school should emphasize on students’ convenience. Besides, a university can obtain a more positive reputation by not spending too much money on students’ sport events.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
...students’ convenience. That is, if they gives more money to libraries, students can f...
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Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'surrounding'?
Suggestion: surrounding
...library, so students have a comfortable surroundings to enjoy reading books and articles. Be...
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Line 5, column 703, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...n NT dollars on both its school library as well as a tennis competition, but most Hua-Xia ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, look, so, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2457.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50896860987 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01835780224 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477578475336 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.1496072358 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.5 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7777777778 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396754707925 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148312265646 0.076458572812 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0972927312213 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.308017667306 0.150856017488 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131250839932 0.0645574589148 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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