At some universities, students take part in making decisions about the issues that affect daily life of everyone on campus such as how many hours the libraries should be open each day or what kinds of food should be served in the cafeteria. But at some universities, experts are hired to make these decisions, and students are almost never involved. Which approach do you prefer and why?
Whether students should participate in deciding school policies arouses a heated debate. Some people claim that university should hire experts to make vital decisions, while others disagree. As far as I am concerned, I believe that students should actively be involved in college-related issues. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, students care about their rights, and deciding school issues can prevent their rights from being infringed. For instance, when I was studying at university, my school initially required every student to wear uniforms to school. Nevertheless, a considerable number of people, including me, thought that such a policy restricted students' rights of expression. Hence, we actively lobbied my college to abolish such a regulation. Several weeks later, the principal of the students' council agreed and abrogate it, and students finally gained permission to wear their favorite clothes and dresses on campus. On the other hand, experts are usually exceptionally conservative, so from time to time, the policies enacted might not be compatible with modern worldviews. Furthermore, if experts were responsible for school decisions, students might not have the gateway to express their disagreement once their rights were violated.
In addition, students are exceptionally concerned about their abilities, and participating in school decisions can improve different aspects of their abilities. Take my brother's university as an example. My brother's university allowed every student to decide on several essential university-related topics, such as enhancing the food quality in canteens, improving library facilities, etc. Hence, students on both sides frequently participated in debates, and these debates helped students sharpen their public speaking skills and critical thinking abilities. Contrarily, if experts made all school decisions, students would not enjoy opportunities to debate with others. Consequently, they might miss plenty of chances to strengthen their thinking skills and language abilities. Evidently, partaking in determining school policies can help students enhance their abilities.
To conclude, I maintain that students should be actively involved in making decisions about college issues considering the aforementioned arguments. After all, students are extraordinarily concerned about their basic rights as well as their general abilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whether students should participate in deciding...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...veral weeks later, the principal of the students council agreed and abrogate it, and stu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, if, nevertheless, so, then, well, while, after all, for instance, in addition, such as, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.9768115942 4.8611393121 123% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08377736546 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582608695652 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1519572499 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.1 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191205309129 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632961116024 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053443903186 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141801247829 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435053624893 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.11 10.9000537634 157% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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