Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's developing world, it is crystal clear that every individual not only has to be well-educated and learned but also has to be healthy and sociable. In this regard, some people might claim that universities should focus on their educational aspects rather than their recreational and athletic aspects. Others, however, believe that great universities should consider both kinds of aspects and allocate well-balanced funds to them. Personally, I am of the opinion that the second theory - allocating an equal amount of money to both aspects - can be beneficial to students as well as universities for two conspicuous reasons which have been elaborated upon in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, as a matter of fact, students should be both mentally and physically healthy apart from learning various courses which are provided by their universities. There is a famous proverb in my culture which says, ' A healthy mind is in a healthy body.' In other words, In order for students to become successful in their education and also in their future careers, universities should consider their students' mental and physical health. If universities consider this health, they would provide their precious assets, their students, with various recreational and social services, such as sports competitions, ceremonies, parties, etc. By doing so, students can establish friendships with their academic peers, and also they can guard against diseases that might occur in the future. These simple and important occurrences imply that the students are healthy and successful during their academic studies. On the other hand, if universities only concentrate on some issues like books, teaching, and libraries, societies will face the so-called phenomenon of one-dimensional people, in which people tend to only read books and work for their employees, and they will be extremely like robots; therefore, the majority of these societies will be devastated in addition to suffering from health problems.
Second, it is of great help to the reputation of the universities, if they lay equal emphasis on the aforementioned aspects. When a university provides its students with sports and social services, many of the graduates of that university can be successful and famous athletes, presidents, celebrities, etc. This can be a kind of free and great advertisement for the university, thereby grasping the attention of people and professors. As a result, renowned professors and instructors will have a penchant for teaching at that university; thus, the university will prosper and its world ranking among its counterparts will rise significantly. Moreover, more money can be earned by the university, for more students choose to study at it. If we take a glimpse at famous and wealthy universities, such as MIT and Stanford, we can infer that many great athletes and presidents account for the alumni of these universities, since they have emphasized their students' physical and mental health as well as educational methods. Despite these famous universities, there are several universities whose policies only contain teaching theoretical lessons and books. These universities are less likely to become famous and prosper financially, because fewer students decide to pursue their majors at them and their professors are not experienced enough.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, it is greatly beneficial to both societies and universities, if universities allocate a sufficient amount of money to different fields. In so doing, societies will enjoy healthy and successful members, and universities reputation and quality will enhance dramatically. I wish that, one day, all the members of my society become successful and lead happy, healthy lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, apart from, as to, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 34.0 13.8261648746 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3194.0 1977.66487455 162% => OK
No of words: 581.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49741824441 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90957651803 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04695823199 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488812392427 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 983.7 618.680645161 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.0146435375 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.181818182 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4090909091 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.096161472064 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335340653068 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282040722994 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0632366394501 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182845081361 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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