In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
In today’s world, as we can witness, every individual is attempting to earn his or her own income and stay on their own feet. This issue also includes teenagers who intend to have their own jobs and make their own money. Some are of the opinion that teenagers should only focus on their school errands and avoid working. Some others, however, believe that working not only helps teenagers to earn money, but also promises them a bright future. As far as I am concerned, it is extremely beneficial that teenagers tend to work in their non-school hours. I have this opinion for two conspicuous reasons which are elaborated upon in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, teen years is an important time in every individual's life since they learn the necessary life skills which constitute the infrastructure of their invaluable future. In this time, teenagers should learn some major skills such as time management, money management, social communications, and interactions with other people. Quite a few of these skills and abilities are not provided by schools, since most of the schools and similar educational institutes tend to teach students how to solve mathematical questions in order to 'contribute' to their precious society. Despite schools, another source that students can assimilate the vital life skills is their very society. Society provides materials that cannot be conveyed to students by schools. In fact, in order to learn these materials, one should experience dealing and interacting with each element of his or her society, because these skills are only learned through practical approaches. By working, students can manage their time , because they have to keep a balance between their school hours and work hours. They also can manage their money, since they value their self-earned money more than their parent-earned money. Furthermore, by experiencing real situations and dealing with social problems, they will learn how to deal and interact with other people in an excellent manner.
Second, these days, many families have encountered financial problems, in that the modern life requires higher amounts of money for providing its countless merits. In contrast to the life in the past, people ought to spend their money on some things like online services, car and house rents, home bills, etc. All these factors require a higher amount of money as compared to the past. Take, for instance, a family including a father, a mother and three children. If only the father of the family works, he has to earn sufficient money to cover his family expenses such as foods, clothes, school tuitions, etc. It is clear that in many similar cases the father's income is not enough for his family and he might be under a lot of pressure of working, paying bills and supporting his family. If the children of this family work in spite of their school, they can pay for their own expenses such as their clothes and school fees. Therefore, if students tend to work they can help their families better and many of their money problems will be solved significantly.
To sum up, with all this taken into account, student's working can be both beneficial to their future and their families. They can learn key skills of life as well as they can help their families financially. I expect that one day all schools will intend to provide life skills rather than useless lessons that a person will need only a few times in his or her life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...een years is an important time in every individuals life since they learn the necessary lif...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... working, students can manage their time , because they have to keep a balance bet...
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Line 3, column 1338, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an excellent manner" with adverb for "excellent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... to deal and interact with other people in an excellent manner. Second, these days, many families h...
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Line 5, column 655, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'fathers'' or 'father's'?
Suggestion: fathers'; father's
...is clear that in many similar cases the fathers income is not enough for his family and...
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Line 7, column 137, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to key'
Suggestion: to key
...ture and their families. They can learn key skills of life as well as they can help...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance, in contrast, in fact, such as, as well as, in contrast to, in spite of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2882.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 577.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99480069324 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58327152018 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481802426343 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.978100514 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.846153846 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1923076923 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73076923077 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110407857639 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040544994873 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367453221096 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080187066622 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390230312365 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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