In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
Teenagers have enough energy and if they do a job with studies then they can channelize their energy in constructive work. I think it is a good idea which helps teenagers to develop their personality in a positive direction. There are several reasons why I agree with this idea.
Furthermore, earning with studies is a good idea because it teaches the value of money to adolescents. Generally it has been observed by psychologists that when they do hard work for several days and then get money as reward then they spend it in an appropriate way. Some parents motivate their children to start a part time job to build a sense of responsibility. I started working when I was in high school to help my family and today I feel that was a good step in my life which made me responsible and independent.
Moreover, doing work with studies teaches time management. The students would learn how to manage two responsibilities together and make balance between them. In high school students have lots of work not only related to studies but also co-curriculum activities. It is difficult to handle the work pressure of two palaces but with time they learn and it is beneficial throughout the life. I woke up early in the morning and got ready for school and after school I took classes of small kids in evening then completed my own assignments.
Additionally, after school education students face tough competition for college or university admissions. The previous achievements and related working experiences matter in the admission process because at university level most of the professors prefer hard working students. If someone wants to take admission in computer science and he or she has experience in an IT company then his or her application would be preferred first then non experienced. There are companies that welcome young talent to get experience.
Finally, these are few examples which support the idea. Teenage is the best time to direct the child about right and wrong. Once they start working in their interest field then no one can misguide them from their path.
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... one can misguide them from their path.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, i feel, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9375 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84440126272 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576704545455 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2804927069 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4736842105 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5263157895 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15789473684 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169507369488 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548070602311 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498425075734 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103953558303 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836006353327 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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