Educators should find out what students want included in the curriculum and then offer it to them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Education is important for everyone to make life better and comfortable. When we talk about curriculum in education system it includes all activities which assist individual to grow dynamically. The students should have freedom to choose the curriculum according to their interest which helps them enhance their qualities. I am agreeing with statement partly, at certain level of educations students become enough mature to choose what is beneficial for them. There are few examples which supports my position and make it stronger.
Moreover, in India at school level the education system provide dance, music, art, drawing, yoga, sports and so many activities as a part of their curriculum. In school all activities are compulsory for all students which is not appropriate. For a student art is fun but for some student art is boring and time-wasting. As well as some enjoy sports, but some wants to spend time in library. If we force to do a work which is not interest area of students, then it will frustrate student and their performance decrease in their interest area also. So, students should have freedom to choose activities for yearly curriculum.
Furthermore, in a psychological research psychologist showed that if a person has interest in the activity then he or she will perform higher. Some works we do very well with little training. These works are work aptitude or we can say natural abilities and individual is very much interested in such activities. The educators should help to students to find their natural abilities and allow them to choose whatever they want in their curriculum, but selection should under vigilance of experts. We can also understand from our own life experience like when we get job in our own interest area then everything makes us happy and we do it very enthusiastically because we just complete the work to get salary. As well as the students must feel zeal about the curriculum, and it will happen when educator told to students to choose activity of their interest.
Additionally, similar system is applicable for higher education system also. In USA the universities open the windows to choose courses and students list out their interested courses for each semester. This is a healthy system to select courses because it makes students responsible for their own choice. They studied hard but with full energy because they choose it. In some other country’s students get courses from universities and they must complete it for exams. Educator should help to students and be careful whether they are selecting according to their strengths or not.
Finally, above points show that the educators should give freedom to students to choose on their own wants and wishes for curriculum. It will enhance their abilities as well as enhance performances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...s to spend time in library. If we force to do a work which is not interest area of st...
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ormance decrease in their interest area also. So, students should have freedom to ch...
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... applicable for higher education system also. In USA the universities open the windo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2356.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 459.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13289760349 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82711283139 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472766884532 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7592737914 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.24 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.36 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209506127449 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712609139405 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464293753812 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139521452687 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572568510293 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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