In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
In some countries of the world, it is very common seeing children who have a job. Some people are in opposition to this idea because most think that children should be focused more on their education and schoolwork instead of working. However, other people believe that children are enormously benefited when they work throughout this stage. They can learn about responsibility, gain new skills, and save some money. Definitely, I am in favor of the latter.
First, through a job, children learn so much about how a person becomes responsible. Consequently, they could introduce a considerable advantage in their life that it will be totally useful in the following jobs. For example, one of the most common mistakes that children and adults commit at the first job is not being on. Typically, the managers aware to the person a couple of times, but after some warnings, they could fire the person. As a result, teenagers at an early age realize that this error could bring a harmful outcome.
Second, aside from acquiring responsibility, they could include new skills. Of course, they learn a tone of new skills throughout the school period from different subjects such as math or chemistry to new sports activities. However, a child who is starting a new job usually opens new horizons. For example, when I was fifteen, I used to work with my uncle in his restaurant. Specifically, he taught me everything relationship with how is made Italian pizza. Thus, I could pay my university loan by working at an Italian restaurant.
Finally, who can not say that earn and save money is lovely. And, if the money is won from a vast effortless is doubly remarkable. So, Children can take advantage when they still are younger because they do not have to face bills or loans. Besides, they can save money for whatever they want. For instance, I remember that one of my friends wanted a bike. However, his parent had a tight life, and they could not give him an allowance like me. Although he began to save money at his first job and after a while, he was able to buy a bike. It was a perfect example of the importance of working during our childhood.
In conclusion, while some parents disagree with the idea that children could work, others think that they could acquire many benefits although. I am convinced that they could find a balance between both school and job in order to end up in a win-win result.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, second, so, still, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7661097852 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64615064303 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546539379475 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4963664247 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.8076923077 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1153846154 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187898520776 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488939935393 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459219364467 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111283357661 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442523630045 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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