Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, universities and colleges make many programs about sports and social activities. People have different ideas and thoughts regarding whether the activities should get equal financial support as classes and libraries. Certainly, some people if asked would disagree that schools should focus on academic factors and facilities. However, the activities should be funded the same as the academic facilities because students can relieve their stress and improve their relationships.
Firstly, it is important to consider that students can reduce their stress. Even though if schools focus funding on academic factors, students will be able to get higher equality of education, it is not meaningful when students have bad conditions of mind due to the stress. However, sports and social activities help diminish their stress because when they do the things, they can forget about their works and just focus on the activities. Also, by refreshing their condition, they can do their works more efficiently. According to a study, students who had taken part in sports or club activities tended to get higher grades in the classes. This is because stress is inversely proportional to concentration. Moreover, by doing sports or club activities, students can decrease their stress the activities. Consequently, the study's researchers concluded that extra activities in schools help center on one thing without distracted and unstable minds.
Second, students can widen their networks. One of the main purposes of schools is to teach students academically. However, socializing is also an important factor that students should learn at their institutions. Since students have to focus on instructor’s speaking at their classes, they do not have opportunities to contact other students privately. That is, they cannot learn social or communication skills in classes. This limitation is solved when they participate in extracurricular at schools. Moreover, these things make students more satisfied with their schools. According to an ST university survey, 70% of the respondents said they could be more outgoing by participating in clubs or sports. This is because students have to interact with other people when they join in the activities. This behavior made them learn social or communication skills. They also added that enlarging their networks by the activities makes attending colleges more valuable. Therefore, the activities can help not only making friends but also increasing satisfaction with attending schools.
In conclusion, colleges should give a lot of financial investment on sports and social activities like academic factors. The reason behind this as follows. Students can decline their stress because they can enjoy doing the activities without worries about their school works and the refreshing mental condition helps do the works much more efficiently. Also, they can expand their network by joining in the activities since when doing them, students have chances to exchange with other people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2568.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59477124183 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8963910514 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468409586057 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 749.7 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2423616923 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7142857143 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3928571429 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96428571429 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171578877847 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566024818777 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500385010557 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134422387971 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458266726256 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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