Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Are sports and social activities at universities and colleges as important as classes and libraries? I believe that main focus of all universities and colleges is to provide education at high level, broaden their mind and help them to grow emotionally, physically, and especially socially. People who is willing to attend a university or college do not only expect sophisticated educational programs, they also seek for a place they can take part in their favorite activities such as sports and other social activities. Therefore from my perspective, those social activities must get attention and funding as educational programs.
First reason I want to point out is student are just humans, not a machine. After a long tiring lecture or discussion, they need a time to take off their mind for a while and have a nice time with other students. The place such football court or game room which is used during leisure time of students must receive considerable amount of money. Thus students can be satisfied, may feel more motivated and energized, as a result it could lead more positive mind, most importantly more social contact with others.
Second reason is our society is changing quickly. The employer not only require education from people, also social skills, and their ability of playing any kind of sports or any talent of arts. For an example, if two people applied for a job, (they have same degrees of same university), How the employer would decide which one is worth this job? In this case, the employer directly look at their social skills, say the one is pretty good at basketball and played a special role in his university basketball team. He is undoubtedly gonna definitely be chosen. Because of this reason, university has to pay attention to their student's social skills, provide them the opportunity to develop themselves in other fields.
To put it briefly, social activities are crucial for lives of students, further their chance to get a decent job and effect their career. For these reasons, sports, arts and social activities must receive equal financial support as main education programs at university.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, first, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05382436261 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73196233461 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57507082153 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0149161836 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0625 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214742375394 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765935204386 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861729547183 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128822123116 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444026489886 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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