Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Universities, like any other institutions have a limited budget and an immense list of areas to boost. Whether the universities should spend money in social and sports events, though, it is a matter of intense debate. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that schools should focus on updating their libraries and improve their classes quality. This position is based on two main reasons, which will be analyzed thoroughly below.
Firstly, the social aim of any college is offering the best educational program possible and graduating solid professional. When youngsters go to a university, they have a goal of become into a prestigious professional, no attend to a party or sport game, for that exist pubs and stadiums. A convincing example of that, was the decision made by my university one year before I graduated. The university direction accorded sponsor a sport festival for the fifty anniversary of the school. To make a long history short, the cost of that festival was so elevated, that the director had to trim funds in areas like the library or the housing, to obtain the money needed. As a result, those areas had to reduce their services and the complains from the student did not delay in arriving, forcing the event cancellation.
Secondly, to count with modern equipment for classes and updated libraries is the nucleus of a successful educational process. It means, that exist direct correlation between the classes quality and the material available with the professional graduated quality. For example, when I was a freshman university student, the university made a giant effort to inaugurate a new laboratory of science with the most modern technology in electronics and computing. Consequently, in only a few months professors claimed the clear improvement in the level reached in the researches made by the pupils in those areas. Furthermore, the prestige of the college increase drastically, which made possible find new sponsors willing to donate funds to finance other less productive areas.
To sum it up, I am of the opinion that the university should put all its capital and efforts in its classes and library services. this is because the main goal of any university is to guarantee an exceptional preparation of its student and because exist a relation between the equipment quality and services available for the student and the learning process quality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1887755102 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93306116059 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543367346939 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9536231294 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.647058824 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0588235294 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125659098175 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410125123567 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374203000522 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0771474668827 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0110879143074 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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