Do you agree or disagree with following statement? In universities, people tend to be more concern about the career prospect of the subject they learn. Some people propose that student should learn subjects with fast job growth, including science, technology, and engineering even if they are interested in other subjects.
There is no cast of doubt in the importance of students' prospective careers in our sophisticated era. Students consume their golden youth time to gain the ability to have a suitable career and their eagerness. Although some people prefer that they should study the subject in which proper career find easily, from my point of view, it would be better for students to follow their interests to become more successful in the future. In the following paragraphs, the most outstanding reason for my opinion will be explained.
The first remarkable point to substantiate my standpoint is that there is not proper embed for most technologies connected to engineering and science in many countries like under-developed counties. The students who graduate in those majors also cannot find their dream job in those categories. In fact, this situation brings them to work as an employee at non-related positions. Indeed, it would be better for them to follow their interests to achieve their dreams. To bring into the more vivid picture, let me explain my personal experience. When I wanted to choose a university major, my father persisted that I study engineering. On the other hand, I was a big fan of art, but my father convinced me art majors do not have a future, and it would be hard to find a job. Therefore, I have chosen mechanical engineering. When I looked for a job after graduation, there was no one for women because, in our country, rough rules prohibit or make it unachievable. After a while, I gave up for the searching job, and I began to work on my interest, namely art. I feel that I waste my four golden years to learn a major that I would never use it in my entire life. Had I study art at first, I would probably be a great artist in my major as I am now.
Another worthy reason is the key-point of success is in the following of the fondness. It has been proven by psychologists that individuals who persist in their eagerness are more successful because they do their duties by marvelous enthusiastic feelings. Thus, this provides them with a great opportunity to climb the success' tree progressively. For example, my brother stands on his interests, and he chooses literature as his major in the university. As his vast love in this area, he read most of the novels in the world that inspired him to write a wide variety of stories and poems. After a while, his writes became popular in university, and after that, his stories and poem had been published by a famous publisher. Now he is one of the youngest and most famous poets and writers in our country. He could not be at this position if he had not followed his dreams and persisted in his interests.
To take all the aforementioned into account, one can conclude that following and persisting on interests not only plays a pivotal role in each individuals' success, but also prevent them from wasting their time on which programs that do not help them at all during their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1167, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'studied'.
Suggestion: studied
...d never use it in my entire life. Had I study art at first, I would probably be a gre...
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Line 4, column 144, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...s not only plays a pivotal role in each individuals success, but also prevent them from was...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, i feel, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68076923077 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7904740748 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507692307692 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9727285627 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.36 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.12 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140118038914 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368414575248 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042198280764 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0866779642122 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665573093896 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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