In order to improve students’ life quality, the university has several good ideas, such as providing a study room, a small gym or entertainment place. As far as I am concerned, building an exercise room in the dormitory would be the best choice. My reasons and examples are as follows.
To begin with, building an exercising room would be beneficial for students to do more physical exercises than before. Studying pressure is very intense right now, physical exercise is one of the most popular ways for students to release pressure. More and more students prefer to go to gym every week. However, they oftencomplain that going to gyms outside of campus waste them too much time. And that’s the main reason that they don’t have enough exercise and are unable to relax themselves very well. For example, my brother Leo are studying in Harvard university and there are lots of gyms near the campus. His friends and he became members of one famous gym several months ago. At first, they usually went there five times a week. But now most of them go there only once a week because they think going to gym become burden instead. Before going to gym, they have to come back to dormitories and changeclothes. And their campus is very large. Walking from dormitory to the gate often cost them at least fifteen minutes. They have to come back before ten p.m. because the door in their dormitory is closed at ten p.m. If they finish their homework at nine p.m., their plans of exercising in gym will go off. But if there is a gym in the dormitory, students can do exercise at anytime they want. They can also do exercises many times during a day. Having an exercising room could help students improve their exercising efficiency.
More over, it would be very convenient for students to make friends if there is an exercising room in their dormitory. The intense studying pressure cause more and more students to spend their times alone everyday and they do not have lots of opportunities to know new friends. But a gym in the dormitory could provide lots of chances to know new people. For example, when being a freshman, I spent most of time in studying and exercising alone like other students. I had no time to go to club and try to make friends. Almost everyday I was tired of walking from dormitory to classrooms and from dormitory to gyms. One year later, I changed my plan and decided to do exercise in the corridor in my dormitory. More and more people walked up to me and talked with me. Sometimes we discussed knowledge of keeping fit, sometimes we complained our own worries. Gradually I had lots of friends. If there is an exercising room in the dormitory, more and more people will make friends easily.
Although some people argue that providing a quiet room for studying or entertaining is equally desirable, I think their disadvantages outweigh the advantages. If there is a studying room in the dormitory, more students would be under more intense pressure than before. Besides, if there is an entertaining room in the dormitory, some students might spend too much time over there and they would not have enough rest for the next day’s class. So both two options are not beneficial to help students relax themselves very well in the dormitory.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, so, well, at least, for example, i think, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2882.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93004115226 4.8611393121 122% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.7141260379 2.67179642975 176% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534979423868 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 866.7 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 119.76424309 48.9658058833 245% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 137.238095238 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198415717426 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692574188737 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520276560307 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14780687088 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370542727415 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 58.1214874552 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.41 10.9000537634 160% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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