Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critically important that people have a profound vision through history. Personally, I believe that visiting museums is the best option to learn about a country. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, there are a lot of museums in worldwide, and everyone can access them, which means that visiting museums is not a problem for people. In contrast, in the past, the public was not allowed to enter all museums. Also, a lot of old and valuable artifacts were not excavated completely. But, now, this activity is a popular entertainment among people, and it has a huge amounts of revenue for governments. We can walk through history by visiting museums. Lots of information and data are available there. Precious wares and utensils are exposed there, which is a fantastic connection for people to get acquainted with history, and imagine those ancient days of every country. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was a kid, our family recreation was going to museums, so I know every detailed event about a lot of nations, which feels amazing. Although I am a 26-years-old girl, this information helps me to have meaningful attitudes toward the current situation of the world. Everybody accepts my outlook as an authentic perspective. If I had not visited those museums. I would not have received my current position among my family and friends.
Furthermore, although it is possible to obtain data about history by watching documentaries or reading books, visiting museums is the most valid resource to get familiar with history because a lot of exact work has been done to gather these things in museums. In books or documentaries, the writer or director can show history to us from their own viewpoint. But in museums, you are alone with your thoughts and ideas, and nothing is better than this situation. People are able to feel history directly, under this circumstance. Although if they want able, there are many instructors who can guide them.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that visiting museums is the best way to know about a country. This is because a bunch of information is available there, which is extremely helpful, and people can feel the history in museums from their own point of view.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'amount'?
Suggestion: amount
...ainment among people, and it has a huge amounts of revenue for governments. We can walk...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...my outlook as an authentic perspective. If I had not visited those museums. I woul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, then, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94329896907 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80632588634 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538659793814 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.6140872732 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3913043478 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8695652174 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04347826087 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146263704214 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436400714425 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659132904618 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114159307516 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420168335667 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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