Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Visiting the museums is the best way to learn about a country.
Throughout history, sociologists and historians are trying to find the best way to learn about a country. Some people may hold the opinion that visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country. However, some others may take the opposite view point and believe that there is no the best way to learn about a country and people should consider many ways. From my perspective, the second belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint the outstanding reasons.
First of all, there are many ways to learn about a country; and not only none of them is the best itself, but also they are complete each other to learn about the country and are supplementary. Two years ago, I went to China. For getting information about history of China, I decided to go to the Beijing’s central museum. When I went there; I was confused, and I did not know what the things are. After that, I bought a book about history of China, and after reading the book, I found that what the things are. Maybe the reading the books about the country and museums are not enough to know what they want. Therefore, people should consider supplementary ways that can help them in the learning process.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that technology has been improved and there are many different ways to help us with learning about a country in effective and efficient ways. For example, there are many information on the internet for people who are interested and by this way, people can get the information in a fast and efficient way without paying the fee. In addition, the best museum about a country usually is located in the country, and it is not affordable for some interested people to go there and observe the things in it for getting information about the country. Professor Breech in the history department of Bentley University conducted a survey research about the most popular way to learn about a country and its antecedents. They proved that the most important antecedents for interested people are time, cost and range of information that the way provide. By these antecedents, they showed that people preferred to use the internet, documentary movies and books, respectively. So, maybe museums are one of the learning ways about the country, but it is not one of the best ways form people’s perspective, because they consider other things in this process.
Briefly, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that visiting museums is not the best way to learn about a country, because people consider some important antecedents to choose learning ways and people usually use this way as a supplementary and secondary way to learn about the country. I highly recommend that museums should provide virtual visiting for visitors to increase the usage of the museums for people who are interested in the country. By this way, museums would be more useful for interested and potential visitors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2427.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8734939759 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69069486816 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.40562248996 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4291499248 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.318181818 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6363636364 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342317736959 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120017765759 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108433707964 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261273283154 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548852855326 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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