Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Young people, the important part of the society, has been valued and triggers heated discussion over whether adolescents today have influence on the important decisions regarding the future of society. The youth, in some people's perspective, are not able to participate in this decision making process. On contrary, my perspective is that teenagers nowadays can have influence on the decision that determine future society due to the development of technology.
To begin with, never should we ignore that teenagers in contemporary time have the knowledge about the society, and thus possess the ability to make the right judgement on the future of society. With the compulsory education policy in most countries, children nowadays have free access to a wide range of expertise, disregarding their financial background. As a result, not only can young people learn fundmental proficiency such as economy and policy, but also they can be exposed to pressing society issues like environmental protection, unemployments. With such knowledge and eyesight, young students today have the competence to apply the knowledge, that they have learned in the classroom, into practical problems. For example, when analysing the solutions to air pollutions, students may come up with the ideas that the governments can increase taxes to the companies that emits excessive amount of exhaust, and simultaneously provide subsidy to the corporations who attach more significance on environmental reservations. However, in the past, it is arduous for these teenagers to obtain such knowledges and realize the issues that requires to be resolved. Therefore, teenagers today are more likely to find out the way to improve the society in the future.
Apart from the knowledge current stuents could have, young people also have more approaches to express their idea and then influence the decisions that determine the future of the whole society. With the advent of the internet, young people can communicate on plenty of social websites, which will indirectly influence the decision of the governments. To be more specific, the social websites such as Twitter, Facebook, and other forums, serves as a platform for yound people to meet with other people who have similar thought. They are able to stay together and criticize wrong regulations or laws enacted by the authority. For instance, in order to show their opinion about inappropriate regulation, young people can stay together and criticize the government. Such enormous voice on the internet, undoubtedly, will form a huge pressure on the governors, forcing them to reconsider their decision. As a result, young people can influence the society of the future in a unstraightforward way. In contrast, teenagers will find it laborious to organization people together and find a way to express their opinion toward the decisions made by the adults.
In conclusion, teenagers today definitely have influence on the decisions about the future of sociey because they can acquire necessary knowledge and express their opinion effortlessly today.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...e future of society. The youth, in some peoples perspective, are not able to participat...
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Line 5, column 968, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a unstraightforward way" with adverb for "unstraightforward"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...can influence the society of the future in a unstraightforward way. In contrast, teenagers will find it la...
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Line 5, column 971, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... influence the society of the future in a unstraightforward way. In contrast, tee...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2607.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4539748954 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98559607069 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497907949791 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 825.3 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.2343595537 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.210526316 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1578947368 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.89473684211 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262423034294 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905113883782 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696637866576 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182788590372 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524893747033 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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