Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People in the past are more interested in improving their neighbourhood (the area where they live) than now.
Neighborhood, the area people live in, has been valued and triggers a heated discussion on whether people are willing to better it nowadays. Modern people, in some's view, desire to improve the area in the vicinity, compared with decades ago. Contrary to their opinion is my perspective that several issues prevent contemporary people from participating in community activities including the lack of time and capability.
It should be prioritized that contemporary people, including students and adults, distribute less time to the neighborhood, compared with those in the past. First, never should we ignore that students nowadays live a hectic school life. To explain it further, they not only spend 10 hours per weekday attending classes and doing homework, but also attend extracurricular activities on weekends. The shortage of spare time discourages teenagers from community service. In comparison, there are less pressure in the past so students didn't need to study as hard as they do today. Similarly, modern adults, who are struggling for a promising and rewarding career, are also overwhelmed by burdensome work. After they are overloaded in the workplace, they will definitely find it laborious to improve their vicinity. With little time allocated to the neighborhood, present adults are less likely to publicize the importance of improving the local environment and take part in specific community activities. In the past, however, adults had little work to do, especially in rural areas. This relaxing atmosphere provided them with the opportunity to spend more time enhancing their neighborhood decades ago.
What should be equally emphasized is that modern people, rather than dwellers in the past, lack knowledge and money to better the region they reside in. First, most people, who lived in the countryside in the past, were involved more in farming and most of them own the expertise and skills that are suitable to change the local environment, such as planting trees and reducing pollutants. Unfortunately, these kinds of pragmatic knowledge are neglected by modern education. Due to the development of technology, more and more people moved to downtown. Most inhabitants have less access to practical skills because they are supposed to learn professional knowledge and become experts in a specific area. Even if with appropriate types of equipment, contemporary people are not able to plant trees individually. Besides, even with enough knowledge, modern people are less interested in improving the local environment owing to the financial cost. The price of tools or materials, which are used to improve the environment, can not be afforded by the inhabitants. The absence of the government's investment in the community undermines their interest in their region. On the contrary, the money distributed to infrastructure was sufficient several years ago. As a result, local residents just need to dedicate themselves to the neighbor and didn't have financial pressure. The government support in the past, with no doubt, encouraged people to devote themselves to enhancing the local area.
In conclusion, the absence of time decreases modern people's willingness in improving their regions. The lack of capability also serves as an obstacle that lowers their passion to participate in community service. Only with those mentioned above can we draw the conclusion that modern people are less interested in the construction of their living environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e less pressure in the past so students didnt need to study as hard as they do today....
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
... by the inhabitants. The absence of the governments investment in the community undermines ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...dedicate themselves to the neighbor and didnt have financial pressure. The government...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, similarly, so, well, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2947.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46753246753 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9998181373 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510204081633 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 934.2 618.680645161 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1874732036 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.25 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39285714286 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292089707923 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738982619673 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485339069833 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183349224783 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220545168952 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 86.8835125448 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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