Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People in the past are more interested in improving their neighbourhood (the area where they live) than now.
Neighborhood, the area people live in, has been valued and triggers a heated discussion on whether people are willing to better it nowadays. Modern people, in some's view, desire to devote themselves to improving the area in the vicinity, compared with decades ago. Contrary to these people's opinion is my perspective that several issues prevent contemporary people from participating in community activities including the lack of time and capability.
It should be prioritized that contemporary people, including students and adults, distribute less time to the neighborhood, compared with those in the past. First, never should we ignore that students nowadays live a hectic school life. Not only should they spend10 hours per weekday attending classes and doing homework, but also they may attend extracurricular activities on weekends. The shortage of spare time discourages teenagers from community service. In comparison, there are less pressure in the past so students didn't need to study as hard as they do today. Therefore, little time can be allocated to the environment of the neighborhood compared with decades ago. Similarly, modern adults, overwhelmed by burdensome work or struggling for a promising and rewarding career, find it laborious to improve their vicinity. With little time allocated to improving the neighborhood, present adults are less likely to publicize the importance of improving the local environment and take part in specific community activities. However, adults were eager to enhance their neighborhood decades ago.
What should be equally emphasized is that modern people, rather than dwellers in the past, lack knowledge and money to better the region they reside in. First, in the past, most people own the expertise to change the local environment, such as planting trees and reducing pollutants in the community. These kinds of practical knowledge are neglected by modern education because people are required to learn more professional knowledge and become experts in a specific area. Contemporary people, even provided with suitable tools and equipment, are less likely to plant a tree without assistance. In the past, people were involved more in farming and most of them mastered skills to improve the environment. What's more, even with enough knowledge, modern people are less interested in improving the local environment owing to the financial cost. The price of tools or materials, used to improve the environment, can not be afforded by the inhabitants. The absence of the government's investment in the community undermines modern people's interest in their region. On the contrary, the money distributed to infrastructure was sufficient several years ago, encouraging people to be engaged in enhancing the local area.
In conclusion, people in the past were more interested in improving the local environment because they have more leisure time and they were more capable to do such things compared with contemporary people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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...ered skills to improve the environment. Whats more, even with enough knowledge, moder...
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... by the inhabitants. The absence of the governments investment in the community undermines ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, similarly, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2528.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50762527233 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96765775692 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498910675381 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9765393569 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.909090909 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8636363636 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86363636364 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287611444381 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831727007394 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568848179173 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196717869125 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513592909049 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 58.1214874552 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 10.1575268817 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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