High salaries with high risks of losing a job or a secure job with a low salary
Occupation, the foundation of a quality life, has been valued and triggers heated discussion over whether it is sensible to choose a high-paid job with a high risk of losing job. A less rewarding but secure job, in some people's view, should be prioritized. On the contrary, my perspective is that we should better choose career with high salaries though at high risks of losing jobs.
To begin with, never should we ignore the positive effect of a high salary on people's life, including personal life and the whole family. Obviously, it is high salaries that enable people to purchase more things to improve their living standards. To be more specific, the more money people earned, the more likely they are to taste delicious but expensive food frequently, go traveling every month, or watch movies every week, making their lives colorful and enjoyable. How could people have the competence to afford such living standards if they choose the career with low salaries. Besides, employees who have high salaries will also place their family as beneficiaries. It is well-acknowledged that most people work in order to support the whole family. The more money they earned, the more likely they will provide their older parents with constant medical care, and give their children access to a well-rounded education. People who get low salaries, however, may find it laborious to sustain the whole family, not to mention a better life quality.
In addition, even if the job is not secure, the risk of losing that job can be easily reduced and decreased. Never should we ignore that boosting productivity helps secure a career. To be more specific, people, by spend less time on distractions such as sending messages to friends, browsing social media, can improve work efficiency, and thus secure the job. Besides, people will be motivated to learn more knowledge and skills if they desire to secure their job. People may learn some programming skills to improve the work efficiency or improve producing procedure so that the quality of the product will be improved. People will not have such stimulation if their job is secure, since even if their work efficiency is tremendously low, they will not lose that job.
In conclusion, a rewarding but not secure job is better, because it can improve the living standard and benefit personal development.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, thus, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05398457584 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65248296927 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491002570694 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1329247881 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.222222222 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6111111111 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369098650124 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123987721835 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108180688389 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242205306769 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.160463195383 0.0645574589148 249% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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