Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Professional athletes, such as football and basketball players, do not deserve the high salaries that they are paid.
can you state the score range of the essay based on the toefl rules: Professional athletes are known to have a remarkable amount of income. That it's fair that these professional sportsmen receive such a huge amount of money has always been a contentious issue. In this regard, some hold the conviction that they deserve the money they gain. Nevertheless, some have an alternative perspective. As far as I'm concerned, the received stipend by athletes is well-deserved for myriad reasons that will be expounded and delved into in the following paragraphs.
To commence with, these athletes pave long routes to becoming professionals. They must start practicing and training from a young age and train for prolonged hours. They have to make many sacrifices, like giving up family and leisure time to be able to stay in the game and competitions. On the other hand, all common people see, is them playing some games in a league, which some of them don't even result in a win, and receive a considerable sum of money in exchange. This shallow vision and way of thinking of people inhibits them from seeing how much hard work and endeavor these professional players put in work for every single game. For instance, Ronaldo, the professional soccer player, who is also known for his sky-high wage, had a very tough childhood and teen years. He worked really hard to earn money for his family and practice football. However, few people are aware of these facts. Generally, according to the amount of hard work that athletes put in work, I believe the money gained is well-deserved.
Furthermore, the prime years of each professional athlete are limited, and they have to retire earlier compared to other conventional occupations. In addition, due to the nature of their work, they deal with substantial physical and mental work that can have dire consequences. For example, they get severe injuries during the games, which can affect their career path, or they undergo debilitating stress in tournaments, especially international ones. Because they have the burden of a nation's reputation on their shoulder. Hence, this money is both a kind of insurance for their future as they retire early, compensating for the harm done to their physical and mental health and providing them convenience in the later stages of their lives. Investigations have revealed that those athletes in the 80s and early 90s who received not so much money ended up having so much trouble later in life. Based on the statistics, %50 of them even ended up homeless. Since they were not provided with ample money and due to their poor health conditions, they could not engage in new occupations or even start a new business. Thus, considering all these issues, the substantial amount of these athletes' wages makes sense.
To recapitulate, due to all the hard work and sacrifices that professional athletes have to make, which are not conspicuous at the surface, and all those physical and mental injuries they suffer, they need to be assigned high salaries. To guarantee their future well-being and to compensate for all the harm done. I believe that the amount of money they receive is well deserved. Who can say otherwise with knowing all these facts about professional players' lives? Maybe making some documentaries based on these athletes' lives can help enlighten other people's conceptions of them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2816.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02857142857 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78707842058 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 875.7 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0056223347 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.571428571 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157472303862 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464753079968 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035589920613 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113301959199 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288648398144 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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