Do you agree or disagree that professional athletes such as football and basketball players do not deserve the high salaries that they are paid?
No one can deny that sport is one of the essential elements of being healthy physically and mentally. Besides, athletes are the valuable asset of one nation. In this line of thought, there is a debate that whether they deserve to get high compensation. Some people believe that sports people should not be paid high wages, while others, myself included, stand opposite viewpoint and think that they must be paid high and I mentioned some reasons that are elaborated in the following essay.
To begin with, athletes make excellent role models, and their high salary is commensurate with their contribution to society's improvement. Specifically, sports personalities are the professional models for youngsters and kids especially to whom are in danger of many deviations in society. Undoubtedly, most of the young generation have tendencies to celebrities or sports figures; it is worthwhile that their role models to be healthy physically and mentally and lead the society to incline sport and health matters. In this regard, athletes absorb most of the social individuals as followers who may incline to delinquencies and crimes. Therefore, athletes in many aspects save society from many defeats and as a result, they deserve to get high wages due to this huge role and impact that they have in every community.
To add, sports personalities earn money for the whole society, generate remuneration, and deserve their huge salaries entirely. To be more specific, most of the athletes who take the lead in their fields such as football or volleyball bring about much money to the country. In fact, they cause many spectaculars to come into the stadium, and selling tickets and sports merchandise are the results of their achievement. Moreover, they bring many people to watch the sport events and follow their news in TV broadcasting or by participating in advertisements take astronomical money for companies. For example, Lionel Messi deserves a huge salary because he attracts many audiences to the stadium, guarantees a reliable source of income for his club. Therefore, all of these positive contributions justify his huge salary.
To recap on the mentioned reasons for this issue that whether athletes deserve huge remunerations or not, I believe that they are because of the fact that not only are they the professional role model for youngsters and encourage the society to be healthy mentally and physically while preventing of happening much crime, but also they bring about high income in many aspects for their club, commercials, and the whole country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 131, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...rations or not, I believe that they are because of the fact that not only are they the professional role...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20531400966 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88787183396 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492753623188 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.9943962044 48.9658058833 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.6875 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.875 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173343612421 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06001317334 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441618975768 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116198426772 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013811550805 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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