Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of civilization, human beings have been engaged in great struggle whether each individuals are responsible to help their community to improve and prosper or not. Some people believe that adolescents do not pay attention to the benefits of their communities. Others, however advocate the idea that teenagers give enough time to help their communities to have utopia world. I personally concur with the former. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most important reasons.
To begin with, in today's modern world, all people have hectic life and do not have any time to be an effective person in prosperity of their communities. Young people get up early in the morning; go to work and come back home late at night. They do not have any free time to share with others even their family member. They want to become successful in youth, so they spend their whole time on making ends meet, boosting their knowledge, forming a family to name but a few.
Second, these days, people do not care about others as much as themselves, so they do not see any need to help society. In other words, they have a one-dimensional characteristic, which says individual prosperity is more important than society's success. They think they are responsible to themselves not to their communities. They believe that youth does not repeat again and they have not to lose their time with helping others. Noteworthy statics reveal that juveniles tend to do their work first and if there is any extra time, they allocate it to help their intimate friends and their family member and there is not any space for others in every teenager’s life. They are occupied enough not to think to other's difficulties. Not only does the hustle and bustle of modern life push them to work hard but it compel them to be a selfish person as well. This is clearly demonstrates that young people do not give enough time to help their communities.
To sum up, I do believe that young people do not pay attention to their communities at all on the grounds that they prefer their advantages to others and they have quite a lot work to do all day.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, well, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74731182796 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63342641335 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505376344086 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1297083008 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1111111111 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287191393725 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113447321279 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0946610911114 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206910935862 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014852546758 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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