Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Young people play an essential role in our society because they build the future for our country. Although some people would harbor the view that young people nowadays devote sufficient time towards their communities, I believe that in this rapid fast-moving world, youngsters do not give enough time to helping their communities, and would develop them in the subsequent
paragraphs.
To begin with, youngsters do not have sufficient time to help their community. To elaborate, today, companies expect high productivity from their employees, which means that they push their workers to work more than nine hours a day, including Saturdays. As a result, young people are not left with any extra time to support their communities. I must say that my opinion profoundly influenced my opinion on this matter. For example, I am twenty-five years old and working in a German multinational company in India. In the referred company, I work as a Project manager and handle several complex international EPC projects. Based on the timing of different countries such as Uganda, Laos, and Austria, I need to adapt my day's schedule and work more than ten hours a day. As we can see from this instance, young people do not have sufficient time to support their communities.
Secondly, young people need time for their self-development. In the past, people did not need skills to deal with complex problems such as global competition. Whereas, today, youngsters need to acquire specific skills like planning software, 3D tools, analytical systems, etc., which require time and energy. Thus, the remaining time left from their jobs, they utilize in building these skills to contribute to their work effectively. Drawing from my brother's experience, who recently joined a financial firm in Stuttgart. Of course, he acquired financing skills from the University, but at the same time, he needed to learn a specific tool name HySAP, which helped solve the topics pertains to financial transactions. For this reason, youngsters need time for themselves to develop additional skills.
Given the mentioned reasons, young people nowadays do not contribute enough time to support their community because they not only serve additional time in their offices, but also need to build different skills
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and would develop them in the subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, youngsters...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, for example, of course, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 15.1003584229 7% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28021978022 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80928859377 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546703296703 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0302064212 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.777777778 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294016453507 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993634123119 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0963649512899 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210765369297 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551704628777 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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