Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
People’s ability to enjoy life changes as they become older. Personally speaking, I totally agree that life is more enjoyable for young people than it is for old people. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, old people are not able to do many fun activities because of their health conditions. Most old people suffer from age-related pain and diseases, such as muscle deterioration. As a result, they are not capable of doing some enjoyable activities like hiking or riding. On the other hand, young people are usually physically strong enough to enjoy these actions. In addition, some specific diseases like diabetes or high blood pressure, which are prevalent among older people, make them unable to eat whatever they want. They should be meticulous about the food they eat, which makes eating less enjoyable for them. My grandmother has diabetes, and she does not enjoy our birthdays as much as we do because she is not allowed to eat the cake.
Secondly, young people have more time to spend on their hobbies. Compared to older people, young people have fewer responsibilities with family and work. Therefore, they are likely to have enough leisure time for entertainment. In contrast, older people are busy working and taking care of their families. When I was young, the only responsibility I had was studying and earning good grades. Thus, I had enough time to spend with my friends, watching movies and series. On the other hand, my father had to work 10 hours a day to pay the bills, and my mother had to take care of my sister and me all day. They did not have time to do activities they like. Consequently, they were exhausted most of the time and did not enjoy their life as much as my sister and I did.
In conclusion, I definitely agree that young people have more chances to enjoy their life. This is because their health condition allows them to do fun activities, and they have enough time to do things that make them happy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...use she is not allowed to eat the cake. Secondly, young people have more time to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71225071225 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54260056944 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521367521368 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7328856892 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.7619047619 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7142857143 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61904761905 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341648249864 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114422172099 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929777375188 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240213700351 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536902768624 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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