Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe
Increasing sophisticated technology, explosive information, intricate international relationships, all worked together to complicate our daily life and brought to our minds that older people has more influential effect on our daily life than youth. Personally speaking and depending on my experience in this life and actual observation, I think that young people have an influential and tremendous impact on our daily lives for the reasons I am going to explain in this paragraph.
To begin with, youth are utterly important in our society because, they are a source of creativity, ambitious and modernization. for example; I remember one a day, I had a tooth pain and I had to do a root canal treatment. I hesitated between going to a new and modern clinic owned by a young dentist, or, to an old one? Then, I decided to try the new one to give him an opportunity. I discovered that, I had a wrong idea regards recently graduated students and they have a lot of knowledge and ample of modern tools and materials in doing their work, which was missed in the old clinics. So I got my root canal with a recent discovered material and a new instruments and techniques.
Furthermore, young people have the ability to do certain tasks that is hard to be done by an old ones. for instance; we decided to renew our house and add more rooms and one bathroom. When we went to choose the workers, there were two groups, one was all young less that 30 years of age, while others were older than 45. Even though I know that the older workers have more skills and are talented as compared with the young workers. but, In thinking of working ability and lifting rocks and doing other hard subjects, I was pretty sure that the young workers will assume better. Admittedly, I decided to choose the young employee to get done in a fast a well organized manner.
In a nutshell, judging all what I have mentioned above and taking all factors in to considerations, I strongly reinforce my idea, that young people have indelible part in our society, they are the building blocks of our community and their role is very important as that of old people.
Comments
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68085106383 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79076437135 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537234042553 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9452971956 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.333333333 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0666666667 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134739306944 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472364917255 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356030929161 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0809815684236 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0164852453415 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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