Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In fact all of us are interested of how successful people got their success. Although, some people hold the view point that successful people are risky and not usual, on the other hand, others hold another point of view, that those people are doing only what they know in a good way. However, my personal experience and actual observation of live have led me to agree with the statement, that successful people are risky and not usual. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons .
First and foremost, I think people do take risks only in association with things that, they already have known them well. For example; Albert Einstein, a famous physician, he invented a new physical theory which brought him his success. His theory was not a new one, but it was related with his knowledge in traditional physics. So, without a good background information and feedback, he will not be able to create a new theories. Another example is Steve Jobs, the famous executive of Apple company, he has a good knowledge, and talents in computer and basic science. We can oversee his improvements through Apple system. So, without this feedback knowledge, he will not be able to add any thing to the company to improve it. But, because he is satisfied and confident with his abilities, he could take the risk and invent new notions, to add more success to the company.
Moreover, taking risks with things we already know, may enlightens some ideas for later achievements. For instance; back to Einstein, he started with discovering light that all people are familiar with. Then, he discovered some limitations with the light characters, and he started to work on them to get improvement. So, without a good talent and experience in physics field, he might not be able to discover, improve, or get rid of any obstacles.
In a nut shell, judging all what I have mentioned above, taking all factors into considerations, I reinforce my idea and insisted on that successful people may do take risks, but only with the stuff they do know their details . This is their way to be successful, and should be our way too, to follow their steps and imitate them to achieve more success in our lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, may, moreover, so, then, well, as for, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78477690289 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66170798114 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530183727034 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0530602518 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.277777778 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28362711317 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841425884257 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081360697185 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172939178662 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05903589583 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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