much advertisement make products seem much better than they really do?
Advertisements have an influential and fabulous impact on our lives. Nowadays, they influence people in an immeasurable ways. Although, some people hold the view point that advertisement may show the real picture of the product. However, others may hold a different view point and disagree with this idea. My personal experience and actual observation of life, have led me to agree with the idea that, 90% of the advertisements nowadays are not telling the truth about the commodities they do advertising them. In the following paragraph I shall delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first most important reason, the advertisements recently are targeting consumers to buy unnecessary products regardless of their repercussions. The idea is to manipulate people minds with a deceptive tactics to increase their intention of the products and forced them to buy it. For instance, let us take Apple company as an example; the company now is depending on using ample of colors, music sounds and a variety of clever ploys to push people buy their phones, regardless of the imperfections associated with them. By this way they target the society 's mind to buy the products via ample of spectacular shows.
Another reason which deserves some words, the advertisements are now utilizing many famous characters or idols to declare about their commodities. Furthermore, many icons or famous actors are having colossal numbers of fans and people admiring them. For example; if those people noticed their dream actor or sport player is advertising for a shampoo or lotion, they would definitely would go to buy the product, because they thought that their idol is utilizing it. This is a very bad behavior of the campaigns to affect people notions toward purchasing not a good stuff just to earn money.
In a nutshell, judging all what I have mentioned above, taking all factors into considerations, I reinforce my idea that most of the advertisements recently are targeting people via using their famous idols or showing them the unreal features of the product. So, I believe that we need a responsible people to supervise those companies, and tell the society the real characteristics of the products.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15083798883 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98392539158 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553072625698 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.808613699 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1875 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125242519206 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449252634852 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412899493157 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0796168245804 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306365393258 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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