Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answ
All of us are interested of how successful people got their success. Although some people hold the viewpoint to do only what they do know usually. however, others may have different viewpoint in trying new things and take a risk. My personal experience and actual observation of life, have led me to agree with the idea, that taking a risk might be advantegeous for people. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first most important reason, is that taking a risk will encourage and strengthen our interpersonal skills. Moreover, starting a new subjects which is not familiar for us would be a strong challenge. For example; let me talk about my personal experience, I took a great risk when decided to leave my job as a dentist in Iraq, and came to the United State with my family. I knew that to get my licence again, I have to pass many steps which might not be easy for me because, I am not a young person. I started the first step and continued until passed all the boards exams. And here I am taking the Toefl, which is the final step to apply for a school. So, this experience made me more strong and insisted of achieving my goal again.
Moreover, many people prefer action in their life, instead of just doing a regular things. Trying new things might bring more important events in our daily life. For instance, let me talk about my father. He was a marine engineer, and was working in Iraq. After the war, he decided to move to the United State to get better living opportunity. He knew that he would not be able to practice his field again, but he took that risk for the family safety. My dad starts working with DHL company, as a primitive worker, but he was patient, recreational and serious in his job. So. when the adviser had noticed his attempts to indulgde a new methods to get the work done consuming less time, he was impressed and decided to bring him to the level of supervising the workers. This event taught me that, in order to be successful and achievable, we have to be strong and risky.
In a nutshell, judging all what I have mentioned above, taking all factors into considerations, I reinforce my idea that taking a risk is important to add some action in our life and to discover how much strong we are! I believe that success might not be reachable unless we take a risk for a new adventure.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...rsonal skills. Moreover, starting a new subjects which is not familiar for us would be a...
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...arted the first step and continued until passed all the boards exams. And here I ...
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... noticed his attempts to indulgde a new methods to get the work done consuming less tim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48611111111 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55026626545 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5281506701 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0909090909 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40909090909 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184780115836 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571209245243 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745920275763 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142460795132 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112505866137 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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