Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Working has an influential and tremendous impact on our daily lives. It is utterly important to find a secure job, in order to be able to support our daily requirements. Although some people prefer that their kids should choose different career than theirs, however, my personal experience and actual observation of life has led me to prefer that my child has the same profession of mine, for the reasons I am going to explain in this paragraph.
To begin with, personally speaking, I think if the child decided to follow his parents footsteps, it is going to strengthen the bond between the child and the parents. Moreover, all of us nowadays are complaining of being busy all the time in working, in order to support our families and provided them with all what they do need. So, if my kid was working with me at the same place, this will create a strong connection and communication between us, since we are going to share our notions, we asked questions, and trying to find some solutions to solve some problems. For example, when my son Layth decided to enter a college of dentistry, I felt so happy at the moment he told me, because, I realized that this decision will going to shrinken the gap between us, which was created by me being busy all the time.
Furthermore, Ithink working with parents will give the kid the opportunity to learn fast, get a great knowledge and thus, in return will save them more time and energy. For instance, my father was a lawyer and he had his own office. My brother Osama was spending most of his time at my dad's office, he got learned an ample of ideas, and he started to use the same way of thinking like my dad in dealing with life troubles. Meanwhile, Osama made a decision to start studying law, and my dad was so happy with this idea. He started to explain to him, how to deal with cases, how to think and brings all the proofs together, and so on. Osama did not have to spend a lot of time and efforts to get learned these stuff, because, he was already has the a back-knowledge about the subject.
In a nutshell, judging all what I have mentioned above, taking all factors into consideration, I reinforce my idea, that it is better for offspring to follow their parents steps and get the same career, not only because, it is effective in improved their relations, but, also to reduce the time and efforts in getting learned of career requirements. So, let us work with our parents, to be so close to them and get the extra benefits from their experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 729, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
...use, I realized that this decision will going to shrinken the gap between us, which w...
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Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to fast'
Suggestion: to fast
...l give the kid the opportunity to learn fast, get a great knowledge and thus, in ret...
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Line 3, column 744, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...hese stuff, because, he was already has the a back-knowledge about the subject. In a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2050.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50549450549 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54443804325 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512087912088 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.9493227049 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.666666667 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3333333333 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.93333333333 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130980198676 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446146130712 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369984809247 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0898260762854 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420715821921 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.47 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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