Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Working has an influential and tremendous impact on our daily lives. It is utterly important to work in order to get the basics needed to satisfy our living. There are different stand point regarding weather to get a secure job immediately, or waiting for a satisfying one. Although some people agree that waiting for a satisfying job is better, my personal experience and actual observation of life led me to agree with the idea that accepting a secure job is better. I have chosen that for the reasons, I am going to explain in this paragraph.
First of all, finding a secure job is better and more guarantee, it will give us time to get experience, and save some money, until we find a more satisfying one. For example, I have moved recently to the USA and I was working as a general dentist back home, I was looking for a job to secure my life requirement until get my licence here. So, I found an orthodontics assistant job for $13 hourly, I applied right away, and did not wait to find other best opportunity. Because I was in need to start working as soon as possible to support my family at this time, and there was no time to think of the best.
Moreover, I think accepting a secure job is a good idea, because, one day this job may turns to be a satisfying one, for that person. He\She may get improvement and reach a high-level in that position. For instance, my cousin was an; IT man, after his graduation, he applied to a variety of companies, and at the same time he started working in a small private office in his house. He did not like to waste time by waiting for his approval in one of those offices. I remembered that he was complaining at the beginning, but later, he could step by step improved his level and started to get a lot of opportunities to settle softwares or whatever. And now, he is very satisfied with his work, and opened a new private company.
lastly but not least, I have the point that, if people continue to refuse any career offers, because they have unrealistic dream about their future job, they will never get the opportunity to start working. Furthermore, my friend was graduated from a college of science, she does not have any specific talent or experience. She was looking for a high-level career, with a competitive salary, and long paid vacation. She refuses any opportunity she got. unforunately, till now she is still waiting, and she spent three months without doing any beneficial thing.
In conclusion, judging all what I have mentioned above, and taking all factors into consideration, I personally reinforce my idea, that getting a secure job is the way to reach a more satisfying one. So let us keep the hard work and be satisfied with what ever we find, because we can improve ourselves and we can do the best.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 483, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng a secure job is better. I have chosen that for the reasons, I am going to expl...
^^
Line 2, column 351, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t until get my licence here. So, I found an orthodontics assistant job for 3 hour...
^^
Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'an'?
...t position. For instance, my cousin was an; IT man, after his graduation, he applie...
^^^
Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'mans'?
Suggestion: mans
...ion. For instance, my cousin was an; IT man, after his graduation, he applied to a ...
^^^
Line 3, column 708, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...atisfied with his work, and opened a new private company. lastly but not least, ...
^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lastly
...rk, and opened a new private company. lastly but not least, I have the point that, i...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 453, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Unforunately
...n. She refuses any opportunity she got. unforunately, till now she is still waiting, and she...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2274.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53892215569 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70028824523 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516966067864 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 26.0 9.59856630824 271% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0838626905 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.363636364 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7727272727 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25900774363 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760512286663 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593971754201 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149639880053 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040757884935 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.