Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's progressive and sophisticated world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of young people on important decision in society. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that youngest people not eligible to make decision for future their society. On the other hand, others thinks that young people can effect society future. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the second group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
To begin with, youth’s people have positive and constructive influence on the main decision of society future because they have motivation. In other words, young people have sufficient motivation for doing social affairs furthermore employing young individual to cooperate and collaborate of their society decision can helps to develop of country. For instance, empirical research conducted by some master students at many universities shows that they have useful and productive individuals in their society because youths are fully motivated. As matter of fact they put a lot effort to deal effectively with their duties and task and dedicate a lot of time to study and analyze various solution about own problems that have in their work. Therefore, the more motivate in young people, the more influence in their society.
The second reason is that, young people having develop and expand their knowledge because they graduated from high universities. In addition, they engaged to various up-to-date technology. For example, they use the internet and they are able to propose more innovative ideas and rational approaches in solving any problem. In contrast old people do not like use modern equipment and innovative methods in daily affairs. Hence, if government employing youths people, they will have best effect in their country.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that is young people more beneficial for society. Not only they have an incentive in their job, but also they try to develop their knowledge for solution their job problem.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1805.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30882352941 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66493798496 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552941176471 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2939578002 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.176470588 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2352941176 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216488641094 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078350568504 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610135025931 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133528977283 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605328153331 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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