Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s progressive and sophisticated world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of change happening all across the world on people's lives. In this regard, some people are inclined toward the opinion that this change causes people are less happy with their lives. On the other hand, others think that changing has a positive effect on people's lives than in the past. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the second group carries more weight. In the following paragraphs, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my viewpoint.
To begin with, by changing the world rapidly, people with the advent of technology and up-to-date equipment conveniently which helps them to have lives satisfied. In other words, by advanced technology and facilities like the internet and automatic machine, people can accomplish their tasks and duties easily. Empirical research conducted by some master students at many universities shows that that student who able to use the internet, they solve their problem in their homework and project so they are well and happy. Therefore, the more advanced technology and facilities, the more satisfied.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that the rapid change in the world which makes people use modern sports equipment so they are healthy. In this vein, when people explode to various sources of automatic machines and they can do a variety of sports so they don’t have stress and anxiety. For example, when I child, I didn’t have enough facilities and I couldn’t play in my spare time so I got all kinds of diseases because I didn’t exercise much. Hence, If people have modern sports facilities, either they will be healthy, nor they will be happy in their lives.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that is changing the world more beneficial for people. Not only does it provide advanced technology, which they can use this in their routine work and makes them happy in their life, but it also advancement of sports facilities, which put them into a health mood and cause people satisfied with their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a able'.
Suggestion: who is a able
...ny universities shows that that student who able to use the internet, they solve their p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05277777778 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6039129506 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8780924906 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.266666667 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289894853345 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961904845211 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674829963295 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179617060789 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519714469232 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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