Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language.
Nowadays, a controversial discussion has created among communities that younger children should be required to study music or art besides other courses such as match, language and history and list goes on. Everyone in consideration to his private perspective has maintained a specific direction toward this debate. Some believe that this offer can be waste of time while others have a conviction that art or music lessons would teach more lessons about life to children. I am unanimous with the letter group; hence, the next paragraphs will vastly elucidate my vantage point through three salient reasons:
To begin with, nobody could overlook this fact that spontaneously it is very formidable for the young children- five to ten ages- to adapt the school's atmosphere because they have to leave a free world and stick to a rigid organization with a great number of rules. Such a frustrating condition makes most of students disappointed. Wrestling with a variety types of scientific resources will give students a sense of depression. Even worse, some of the young children may escape from school with any excuse; therefore, the best solution for avoiding the mentioned problem is that deans of schools should propose miscellaneous courses such as music or art. So it can be said that fresh atmosphere will overcome the classes.
The second reason for my arguments lies the reality that in recent years, the researchers and psychologists have recognized that watching artworks such as a brilliant painting or listening a master piece of music is able to assist humans’ brain for secreting more Dopamine- a neural messenger in the brain-. The aforementioned chemical substance is responsible for creating the happiness and concentration; consequently, the students' performance can improve during school's life. Furthermore, this opportunity will cause students to gain a power of evaluation of artworks and their soul will be inclined toward beauties. This can help societies to confront few the wars in the future.
Moreover, participating in these types of classes will optimize the interpersonal skills in children. But how? It is obvious that attendance in a classroom requires students to discuss with each other. Since the art or music classes can challenge students' interest; subsequently, they debate with each other keenly. The mentioned discussions can continue in out of classes, finally, the new friendships would form. Meanwhile, providing a bed for students to express their opinions about their favorite matters can give them a sense of self-esteem.
To sum up, this conclusion could be drawn that not only art and music classes are crucial in reinforcing of beauty knowledge among children, but also the young children observe those courses as amusement and at the end, the school atmosphere will not be tedious for them anymore.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2411.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32229580574 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9416069213 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578366445916 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.5017077192 48.9658058833 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.944444444 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38888888889 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210908633482 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562593445619 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640434380419 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121342370586 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060383275894 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.