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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Your job has a greater effect on one's overall happiness than your social life does

What factors affect people's happiness arouse a heated debate. Some people argue that a person's overall happiness highly depends on one's social life, while others disagree. For me, I believe that my job has a greater influence on my happiness. My reasons are as follows.

To begin with, I am a workaholic person, so my job undoubtedly has a more significant effect on my mental mood compared to my social life. For example, I currently worked as an artificial engineer in AIdea Techological Company. Whenever I crafted a high-precision deep learning model by reading state-of-the-art articles, I felt extremely excited to an extent that I cannot fall asleep. Also, I frequently discuss difficult-to-train reinforcement learning models with my colleagues, and we usually become excited whenever we managed to increase the precision of those models by one percent. On the other hand, I only have no more than 10 friends, and most of them are my fellow engineer coworkers. What's worse, we have families to take care of after work, so I did not play video games or watch movies together outside of work. Eventually, I did not acquire any happiness in my social life. Evidently, when it comes to my mental health, my career plays a more important role than my close friends .

In addition, being healthy has a significant effect on my happiness, and working definitely helps me become happier compared to socially interacting with my close friends. For instance, whenever I did some university projects with my friends, they usually procrastinated and tossed all unfinished tasks to me. Thus, I often stay up late, which leads to insomnia. Consequently, I often felt frustrated about the fact that I had to take sleeping pills every day at a really young age. Thus, despite the fact that my friends and I oftensing karaoke and play board games together, my unhealthy body prevented me from feeling glad. Contrarily, I worked as a teacher assistant in my school, and I enjoyed grading students' assignments since I often encountered intriguing solutions to the same algorithm problem. Plus, I like to share fascinating algorithmic ideas and alternative programming solutions with my students. Therefore, I often felt glad performing my TA job, even though my social life is quite boring.

In conclusion, I believe that my career has a bigger effect on my happiness due to the aforementioned reasons. After all, talent, interest, and health are exceptionally essential to me.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...a heated debate. Some people argue that a persons overall happiness highly depends on one...
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Line 3, column 699, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
... them are my fellow engineer coworkers. Whats worse, we have families to take care of...
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Line 3, column 997, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ore important role than my close friends . In addition, being healthy has a sig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, really, so, therefore, thus, while, after all, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2070.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07943639105 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604938271605 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2308812183 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0909090909 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4090909091 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119079713323 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422335562573 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494395538603 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0902077837546 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404718314464 0.0645574589148 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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