Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Your job has a greater effect on one's overall happiness than your social life does
What factor affect people's happiness arouse a heated debate. Some people argue that a person's overall happiness highly depends on one's social life, while other disagree. For me, I believe that my job have a greater influence on my happiness. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, talent and interest both play important roles in my life, and my mental mood becomes positive whenever I am doing a job that I enjoy, As an example, I worked in an artificial intelligence company called AIdea. I dedicated myself training machine learning models every day. Yet, I am particularly absorbed by the beauty of machine learning models, and the sense of achievement that I gained through crafting AI models make me feel excited. Hence, despite the fact that my social life is relatively dire, I feel extremely happy whenever I successfully come up with a deep learning model with 95 percent accuracy. Contrarily, I cannot imagine myself working as a world-class celebrity and being happy at the same time, since I have no talent or interest in singing or acting. That is, even though I might procure a more colorful social life due to my fame, I might feel upset everytime I record music or act in an action movie.
In addition, being healthy has a signifiant effect on my happiness, and participating in an interesting career helps be become happy. For instance, whenever I did some university projects with my friends, they usually procrastinated and tossed all unfinished tasks to me. Thus, I often stay up late, which lead to insomnia. Consequently, I often felt frustrated about the fact that I had to take sleeping pills every day at a really young age. Thus, despite the fact that I had many college friends, my unhealthy body prevented me from feeling glad. Contrarily, I worked as a teacher assistant in my school, and I enjoyed grading students' assignment since I often encountered intriguing solutions to a same algorithm problem. Plus, I like to share ideas and alternative solutions with my students. Therefore, I often felt glad doing my TA job, even though I my social life is quite boring.
In conclusion, I believe that my career has a bigger influence on my happiness due to the aforementioned reasons. After all, talent, interest, and health is exceptionally essential to me.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...a heated debate. Some people argue that a persons overall happiness highly depends on one...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'help'?
Suggestion: help
... participating in an interesting career helps be become happy. For instance, whenever...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, if, really, so, therefore, thus, while, after all, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92525773196 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88466775489 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587628865979 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7566829682 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.55 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130932542095 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403490990327 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487182364323 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867776764658 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048211698043 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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