Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people think that the university should focus more on the class and formal education and should spend more budgets on them. However, in my opinion, I believe that extra curriculum activities contribute as much benefit for students as the classes do. Then, beside the classes, the university should support the students’ activities such as sports and social activities in term of financial equally to other aspects. Those extra curriculum activities have many advantages, specially building teamwork skills, simulating real working experience, and reducing the stress from the classes.
First, sports and social activities can help student building the essential skill for work, such as working with team. In real working environment that the students have to face after the university, the students have to deal with people from various fields. Some people find it’s hard to handle the different opinions when they are in the professional working environment, which totally different from the university. The activities in the university’s club like sport club or social club prepares the students for the social diversity, because the clubs usually contains the people from more than one professions. For example, I attended the voluntary club when I was in the university. Some members from the faculty of art wanted to make the art project, but others wanted to do the teaching project. I and my team had to find the compromise way for all members, and then we had several meetings until we reach the consensus to the art teaching project. If I the university didn’t support the budget for the club, I wouldn’t get this valuable experience, which is very beneficial for work.
Secondly, the extra curriculum activities mimic the real working situation and shape the student to be more professional. Studying in the classes is essential, but it’s the passive activity. In contrast, working in the real life is very active. We have to attack several issues from several aspects in a day. For example, now I work as an engineer in a large corporate, I not only to deal with the engineering problems, but also to solve some employee issue or accounting problems. It reminds me when I was in the core team of the voluntary club as well. I had to control the project’s budgets in order to make sure that the money will be reasonable distribute to each department. It’s my first time dealing with accounting, which I’d never learn in the class before.
Third, spending time with friends outside the classroom can help student reduce the stress. Learning is consume a lot energy and we can easily feel exhaust from the eight-hour lecture classes. Others activities, especially playing sport, are the important part of studying, because they keep the balance for the students. Human need the balance, otherwise the body may crack down. For instance, my sister was worried a lot about her grades, so she put all of her time studying. Lately, I saw her depressed and tried. She talked to me about her miserable university life, because she has no friend and she disappoint with team project that she can’t get along with other team members. I suggested her to try some sport club at the university, so that she can interact with friends and relax. As a result, she’s now happy with her study and friends. Clearly, the sports and other activities are important for the students.
In conclusion, beside the classes, the university should support the extra curriculum activities in both facilities and money, because they are essential for the students to build teamwork skills, simulate real working experience, and reduce the stress. For the reasons explored above, I strongly feel that the activities outside the classes are important and should get the equal financial support as the classes do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one profession', 'a profession', or simply 'professions'?
Suggestion: one profession; a profession; professions
...ally contains the people from more than one professions. For example, I attended the voluntary ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'consumed'.
Suggestion: consumed
... student reduce the stress. Learning is consume a lot energy and we can easily feel exh...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'disappoints'.
Suggestion: disappoints
...life, because she has no friend and she disappoint with team project that she can’t get al...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'such as', 'as a result', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252136752137 0.229887763892 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.131054131054 0.158761421928 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0911680911681 0.0866891130778 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0384615384615 0.046263068375 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0569800569801 0.0685040099705 83% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122507122507 0.118717715034 103% => OK
Participles: 0.019943019943 0.0351676179071 57% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69137487579 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.025641025641 0.0309702414327 83% => OK
Particles: 0.0014245014245 0.00188951952338 75% => OK
Determiners: 0.118233618234 0.0887237588012 133% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0156695156695 0.0209618222197 75% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00854700854701 0.0139019557991 61% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3828.0 2387.08602151 160% => OK
No of words: 628.0 408.028673835 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.09554140127 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00598923014 4.48200974243 112% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.380573248408 0.338922669872 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.308917197452 0.251872472559 123% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.207006369427 0.174417080927 119% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.135350318471 0.112833075102 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69137487579 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457006369427 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 56.1651303331 59.2087087015 95% => OK
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6684587814 155% => OK
Sentence length: 19.625 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8278876383 48.84282405 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.625 120.699889404 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.59375 0.644075263715 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 50.5167197452 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.74213836478 1.45489161554 120% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30775068177 0.300154397459 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130894017528 0.103427244359 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0959652667286 0.0752933317313 127% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.517188807379 0.497263757937 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.145594765596 0.151897553556 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121985738624 0.114077575197 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0881715220148 0.0781384742642 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.484938320874 0.336927656856 144% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.118890342127 0.067059652881 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251662567889 0.210909579961 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772386522201 0.0618886996521 125% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 24.0 13.6433691756 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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