I strongly agree with the statement that sports and social activities are as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support because being successful does not mean not only being good at classes but also in social life. Therefore, to provide social support to students these activities should be equally supported by universities.
To start with, many students who are interested in sports get scholarship for their education. For some students, sports activities are an important part of their college life. These students usually want to be actively participate in a sports team. If a university management do not provide necessary equipments for sports activities, however, these students cannot enhance enough skills to become good at sports. As a result, they might be ended up giving up school. On the other hand, if the university provide an effective environment for sports activities and financially support the needs of a sports team, same students can get a scholarship due to participating in sports activities. These kind of scholarships have helped many students to get their education without facing high amount of bills. According to a recent study, there are many worldwide soccer players who received that kind of scholarships during their college education.
Another point to consider is that people who have an active social life at the university have become more successful at their career. Even though some students believe that they should focus only their courses while they study, they might be lack of the confidence to express themselves verbally when they graduate. Universities are the place to get knowledge about a specific field and to become fully independent individuals. What I mean is that it is not enough to have knowledge to become successful in the future. Social skills play an important role in one's career and they need to be taught in universities. That is why universities should support social activities equally.
To sum up, for the reasons discussed above sports and social activities should be considered as crucial as classes and supported equally by universities.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, while, i mean, kind of, as a result, to start with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30116959064 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85967453558 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491228070175 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9404575115 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.647058824 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1176470588 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328775985368 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11588031443 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11870821795 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244629113721 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125496874166 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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