Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, schools are not only educational institutes but also places on which every student spend most of their time. There is a thought that as sports and social activities are as important as classes and libraries, colleges and universities should provide the same amount of financial support for both. In my humble opinion, to maintain the success in academic and provide a qualified life for students, I agree with the statement
described.
Firstly, a healthy body, which need a variaty of activities in life, acquire success for the student. Doing sport regularly maintains and leads the biological systems of a body to work properly. Numerous research suggests that the ability of learing new subject need a sufficient work of the brain, and thus, providing adequate oppourtinity for doing a regular sport in schools would benefit students in their academic lives. Moreover, investing to the social activities for students brings a relaxed and refreshed mind after their loaded exam weeks. In the fact that the students cannot afford studying with a stressed and not well mental health.
Secondly, students would easily make new friends, if those institues provide the same budget with the classes and libraries to increasing the amount of sports and social activities. The educational medium of students, in which they interact with other students, would not be effective to make new friends, as those mediums' main reason is not to make new friends. On the other hand, sports and social activities provide the proper medium students to socialize and make new friends. Moreover, the ability of working together with other students would be offered, and thus, they would adapt their future working environment.
Personally, I have experienced the success during my university years by doing a regular sport, scouting club, and socialize in the biology club meetings, where we discuss the articals about neuro-biology and evolution. Thanks to my university investments on these clubs, I achive the success easily, otherwise, it would be difficult to study my courses and spend time on finding investigators for our community. Furthermore, breathing fresh air in high mountains, where we went camping with scouting club, provide the healty body of
mine.
Finally, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries, and so, both should receive equal financal support from shcool institutions, universities and colleges. A healty body is the key for a successful academic career for students, similarly, doing a regular sport during studies provides a healty body as well as a healty life. The medium of the social life of students, which is esential for gaining abilities in group works, can be provided mainly in social activities rather than libraries and classes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Described
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to study'.
Suggestion: to study
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Suggestion: Mine
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, thus, well, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2380.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34831460674 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74887221368 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489887640449 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1447309979 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.222222222 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7222222222 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217891773903 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795025120983 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922052692753 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133533342397 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697529660172 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.