Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As everything in life is like a coin that has two different slides, people must weigh the pros and cons before jumping to conclusions. After all, each and every question or topic requires careful deliberation in that there always multiple variables to a truth. Even though some may adamantly believe that famous celebrities don't deserve to have more privacy, I strongly believe this opinion lacks coherence to some extent. In my humble opinion, more privacy policies should be arranged to protect famous celebrities due to the following reasons.
First and foremost, the majority of individuals would agree with the notion that having a real life can engender a myriad of advantages. The main reason behind this rationale is that famous individuals can't go to a restaurant without being recognized so, people always would take photos with you and your family. In addition to this, in present societies, journals are a big issue because they stalk famous persons wherever he is. To illustrate more thoroughly, My uncle is a famous actor at Amman channel. before he goes to his work he finds a people on his door every morning to ask him some questions. All in all, we can't and shouldn't overlook the upsides of having privacy in our life.
On top of this, social media these days reduced the privacy of our life thereby resulting in unfavorable ramifications. In the eyes of many people in present-day society, snapchat and facebook decreased the privacy of famous persons. Moreover, famous persons now are used to document every event they attend in these websites using smart phones. A great example of this would be football players. Neymar one of the best players in the world, he plays for PSG in France. Therefore, he takes pictures and videos for every match he plays. In addition to this, he was doing comments on matches, so one day he was angry and did a very bad comment on the referee. As a result, he got punished for 3 matches. Long story short, it's clear as day to me that using social media apps can be detrimental.
In summation, yes it's virtually impossible to provide a completely satisfying answer to an open-ended question. Although the jury may be out in this given essay, we can come to a mutual agreement that famous entertainer and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now due to the reasons and details mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: celebrities
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Suggestion: don't
...amantly believe that famous celebrities dont deserve to have more privacy, I strongl...
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Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
... policies should be arranged to protect famous celebrities due to the following reasons. Firs...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...is rationale is that famous individuals cant go to a restaurant without being recogn...
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'would' and 'take'.
Suggestion: would always take
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, after all, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85432098765 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62929459409 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59012345679 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2266255843 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.619047619 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90476190476 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243616983451 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583506563358 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723271521226 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157298578283 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082511408628 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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