Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The people that we work with them is really important in our success. Many people think that study ing hard in university is enough for them to be successful; others would disagree. In my opinion, it is really important to know many known people in the field that we are working for the following reasons.
First and foremost, someone who is known in the job that we just started has many knowledge about that job and can help us a lot. For example, about five years ago, after finishing my study on engineering in Tehran University, me and my friend start to work in a company that was really great and known. All the people there were knowledgable and they helped us a lot and we learnt a lot. After a year all of us were really best in our major and also in our work that lost of companies send us requests to work for them. We could never be as successful as we become in a year in that company if we did not work with that knowledgeable coworkers who helped us alot.
Another reason is that if some one who has a lot of background in his job and knows lots of best people in that field can help you to connect with the strong people in your job. For example, after three years of working in that company, I decided to strat my own work and my boss and my colleagues were really supportive. They help me a lot to become known and they connect me with their costumers and so I grow as fast as possible and after half a year I was one of the best in my job.
Third, I think studying hard without relation with other people just make you an accademic person who can barely become known and get help from others. I remember, when I was in university I had a friend who studied hard but he was really weak in talking to other people and to become friend with his classmates. He was always the best in university and unlike him, I was always the worst person in my coarses but after finishing our studies and become graduate from university, I was more successful than him, because I am a social person and I try to become friend with all the people that I thing are sucessful or are really good in my major. Thus, I used this feature and it helped me a lot in my life.
All in all, many would believe that study hard is more important and it gives you one handred percent success, but as you can see studying hard is nothing if you do not know many people and you cannot use the power of relation with best ones in your field and your job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...own in the job that we just started has many knowledge about that job and can help u...
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Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun knowledge seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much knowledge', 'a good deal of knowledge'.
Suggestion: much knowledge; a good deal of knowledge
...own in the job that we just started has many knowledge about that job and can help us a lot. F...
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Line 5, column 27, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...d us alot. Another reason is that if some one who has a lot of background in his job ...
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Line 7, column 596, Rule ID: YOU_THING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'think' or 'thinks'?
Suggestion: think; thinks
...ecome friend with all the people that I thing are sucessful or are really good in my ...
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Line 9, column 228, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the best'.
Suggestion: with the best
...nd you cannot use the power of relation with best ones in your field and your job.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'really', 'so', 'third', 'thus', 'for example', 'i think', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.176237623762 0.229887763892 77% => OK
Verbs: 0.164356435644 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0752475247525 0.0866891130778 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0594059405941 0.046263068375 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.134653465347 0.0685040099705 197% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.138613861386 0.118717715034 117% => OK
Participles: 0.0257425742574 0.0351676179071 73% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.26201248475 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Infinitives: 0.019801980198 0.0309702414327 64% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0712871287129 0.0887237588012 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0158415841584 0.0209618222197 76% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0138613861386 0.0139019557991 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2448.0 2387.08602151 103% => OK
No of words: 472.0 408.028673835 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18644067797 5.86048508987 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.241525423729 0.338922669872 71% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.139830508475 0.251872472559 56% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0932203389831 0.174417080927 53% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0635593220339 0.112833075102 56% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26201248475 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.39406779661 0.524397521467 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.7140169015 59.2087087015 74% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 29.5 20.5533526081 144% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.6072619446 48.84282405 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.0 120.699889404 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 20.5533526081 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6875 0.644075263715 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 43.4830508475 45.7405998639 95% => OK
Elegance: 0.950276243094 1.45489161554 65% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385057627031 0.300154397459 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.153282394766 0.103427244359 148% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.065855422314 0.0752933317313 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.618624525693 0.497263757937 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158855467924 0.151897553556 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172526161996 0.114077575197 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0791629299997 0.0781384742642 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.403671680326 0.336927656856 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.105112147267 0.067059652881 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276777192652 0.210909579961 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546238552079 0.0618886996521 88% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.