Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Getting a job in which you work with other people is better than getting a job in which you work alone
Nowadays, one of the most important issues of each individuals’ life is a job. We have different jobs, in some of them you work on your own without any co-worker, on the other hand, we have so many jobs in which you must work with other people. In my case, I prefer to work with other people because of two reasons which I will mention in this essay.
First, one of the most important issues in the current era is our social life, we ought to improve it, make some friends and improve our ability to speak in public and participate in different groups. Typically, people spend almost 8 hours of their daily time in their working area, so it is a great opportunity to culminate their social personality. So, in my opinion, it is great to have so many people as colleagues surrounding you, it will help you to be happier, having a great working atmosphere, and improve your social characteristics. I remember I was working in a company, Sepehrsystem, which was a computer software company, I had great co-workers and it made a delightful atmosphere for me and I enjoyed spending time with them and did not feel boring at all, thereby, every day I was enthusiastic to go to the office and see my friends. And by working there I improved my social life, for example, I could talk in public which I had not done in the prior time, but since I had started working there, I had participated in many meetings and they had made me great speaker, insofar as I became the best speaker of our company . As you see working in that company made me a good speaker and it is crucial in everyone's life because you must have the ability to talk and to communicate if you want to be a prosperous person.
Secondly, I think a good job is a job in which you can gain your knowledge, and for learning new topics you have to work in a group with different experts in various careers and use each of them's knowledge to culminate yourself. Because of that, in my opinion, it is crucial for us to work in a group. When I was in the Sepehr system, I was an R&D officer and I really liked to learn about C++ software, so I went to one of my colleagues who worked in that specific section of the company and I asked him to learn me C++. After that, seeing that he was free, he called me to his office and teach me how to use that software; by doing so, now I can claim that I have sufficient ability to work as a C++ programmer in any company. As you see, working in a group with other individuals can help you to gain new knowledge which may change your future job life.
In conclusion, I think we have to consider the working space not only a place to earn money but also a place to improve our social life and our knowledge, It is exactly like a university and you must use this opportunity to excel yourself in different field of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Nowadays, one of the most important issu...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hich I will mention in this essay. First, one of the most important issues ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 480, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., it will help you to be happier, having a great working atmosphere, and improve ...
^^
Line 5, column 758, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oyed spending time with them and did not feel boring at all, thereby, every day ...
^^
Line 5, column 764, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pending time with them and did not feel boring at all, thereby, every day I was ...
^^
Line 5, column 1146, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...I became the best speaker of our company . As you see working in that company mad...
^^
Line 5, column 1189, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... As you see working in that company made me a good speaker and it is crucial in e...
^^
Line 5, column 1290, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se you must have the ability to talk and to communicate if you want to be a prosp...
^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ou want to be a prosperous person. Secondly, I think a good job is a job in...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 591, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... he was free, he called me to his office and teach me how to use that software; ...
^^
Line 9, column 631, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and teach me how to use that software; by doing so, now I can claim that I have...
^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h may change your future job life. In conclusion, I think we have to consid...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 89.0 43.0788530466 207% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 532.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.32518796992 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60930083984 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432330827068 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.580852527 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.4 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4666666667 20.6045352989 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321955328618 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13221849065 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110899730493 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224360601957 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108195651854 0.0645574589148 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 58.1214874552 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.43 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.