Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should focus their budget on environmental protection than on economic development.
Making decisions about how governments should manage their budget to improve their country is a significant consideration. Based on the priority of society, rulers should decide where the best place to spending budget is. The specific controversial question which arises here is whether governments should invest in improving the environment or economy. From my point of view, concentrating on economic growth can offer a variety of benefits that cannot be easily overlooked. There are two convincing reasons to support this idea.
First of all, by economic development, the rate of unemployment will decrease. As a matter of fact, if leaders of a society try to improve the economy, people's futures, especially among youngsters, would be assured since there are many job opportunities for them. In other words, industries and companies need human resources to be productive. People, therefore, will be offered a chance to be hired and earn income to guarantee their future lives. To be more specific, consider a boy who lives in the countryside. He does not have a chance to be recruited in a thriving industry unless there is economic development in the country. He, thus, might be offered to immigrate to the country to work as a worker with a minimum wage for a corporation that needs human labor. On the other hand, if there were no economic growth, he had to continue his father's work and become a farmer, for example. However, working in a big city, he may make sure that he and his next generations will grow up in a town full of facilities and have a proper career. Had it not been for the government concentration on economic development, such a boy would not have achieved this position in his life.
Secondly, another remarkable fact is that the ones who are responsible for decision-making in a government can lead to profits by focusing on economic improvement. Without doubt, a country whose economy is developed can reach its goal in international businesses via by bringing a large amount of money back to the land. Nevertheless, investing in environmental protection is a sort of a waste of money owing to the fact that there are a lot of private companies and campaigns which care about the environment and are prosperous in doing this. Hence, the government should concentrate on more vital factors that can make profits and currency for the country. This way, the rulers can allocate those amount of money to improve other aspects of society, such as helping private companies to do their duties as efficiently as possible. With this in mind, I remember my cousin, Ali, who has a main role in the government, mentioned that a committee decided to spend the budget from taxes instilling money to the economy for some reasons---as everything was secure in the government, he could not tell us what reasons were. After only six months, he said to us by doing that, not only could the government broaden its relationship with many foreign countries, but it also could make profits, which were more than any investment in the past. As a result, the government expends spends the money to improve improving people's lifestyles. Contemplating Ali's experience and my personal observations, I can readily conclude that it would be extremely advantageous for both people and governments to spend their budget on economic growth.
As outlined above, I do believe that decision-makers in governments should manage their budget to be spent on economic development so that they can reduce the rate of unemployment and make profits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 379, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'sort of'.
Suggestion: sort of
...esting in environmental protection is a sort of a waste of money owing to the fact that t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, sort of, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2967.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 589.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03735144312 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99660200945 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51103565365 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 948.6 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6611591377 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.68 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.56 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217335916929 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592170500946 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051554765739 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149607973601 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439197468326 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 86.8835125448 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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