Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex
In our modern life, working has became the most pivotal part of our life. Roughly every aspect of our life is influenced by our careerna to name but a few: our happiness, marriage, health and so on are depended on our job. Therefore choosing an suitable occupation is critical decision.While most people believe that taking a secure job is better than to hired in a risky position, others stand at the other side of the continum. I personally speaking, hold the opinion that taking a satisfying job is better than a secure job, the reasons to substantiate my point of view are outlined in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, progress is very hard in the secured job, and if one person has not interest in his or her job, they will face very hardships in progressing path. It is obvious that today every profession needs a lot of education and skills, and besides these personal abilities and qualities, almost every job needs working hard and concentration. Many people when take secure job ignore their interests and qualities and only try to get that job, but what about after getting that secure job. Many of these people realise that they don't have interest in their job and just do that to gain money and not be fired. This situation leads to an static person and they never can go forward in their career. A personal example can drive this notion to hiome. My older brother got hired as an accountant in the bank, although he never loved accounting but because of parents' pressure he took this job. After a few years he realised that actually he hated accounting and he is just doing that job for living. Even today, after 10 years that he has took that secure job, he couldn't get promption and still is an ordinary employee in the bank. It is crystal clear that without any interest, progession is impossible, especailly in the career which needs a lot of efforts and competition is very high.
Furthermore, taking statisfying jobs can make the person happier and the opposite is true too, working in a job that is not interesting to the preson can make his or her sad and depressed. Today, most of our life time is spent in the workplace, many people don't enjoy their tasks in the work, so the job became an annoying experience for them and they just wait to clock goes one. On contrast some people believe that getting secure job is more important because the economice situation is unstable and they don't want to lose their source of income. But, they don't notice the importance of happiness in the life and they just spend their days of life without any adventure and staisfaction. On survey conducted by Tehran university in Iran found that almost half of the people who work for government and don't have to concern to lose their job, actually have mental problems like depression. In opposite this research showed that employees in the profit companies are more happier.
In conclusion, haveing considered the aforementioned reasona and point, taking a satisfying job is more beneficial that secure job. Althouth it has some demerits but the advantages outweigh the cons. Not only it makes the promotion in the job possible but also it makes the employee more happier. Interesting is a decisive factor in choosing a job not the security of the job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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In our modern life, working has became the most pivotal part of our life. Roug...
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Suggestion: Therefore,
...alth and so on are depended on our job. Therefore choosing an suitable occupation is crit...
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Suggestion: interested
... secured job, and if one person has not interest in his or her job, they will face very ...
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...r sad and depressed. Today, most of our life time is spent in the workplace, many people ...
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Suggestion: happier
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Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, while, as to, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2707.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 572.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73251748252 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57415985581 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475524475524 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 853.2 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9995177443 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.791666667 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298230312378 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931124124524 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749012648269 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194761942039 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274917627315 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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