Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, most of people of the society attend the university and gain a large amount of knowledge about various fields. Most of them do not accept ordinary works and they are of the opinion that great companies have to hire them since they have graduated from the university. I, on the other hand, think that they have to use the opportunity to get a job and they should not wait a lot of valuable time to find an excellent job. I deel this way for two main reasons, which I will elaborate in the following essay.
First of all, most of the great companies need employees that have several years experiences. These companies do not hire students that educated from the university recently because they do not have enough experiences about the work-place. As a matter of fact, it is severe for an individual to find a decent job without working in ordinary jobs. Therefore, if people want to find more satisfying jobs, they have to gain more experiences through working in different low-level jobs. My life is a compelling example of this. When I graduated from the university by a master degree, I tried to find a job with high salary, but I was not successful in that time. it is worth mentioning that I had a lot of financial problems in that time, so I started to work in a company that was not satisfying to solve my problems. After several years, I could find an opportunity to in a great company with high salary.
Secondly, today, the rate of employment is very low, especially in my country. most of the young people do not have a permanent job, and they have a lot of problems to find a secure job. In this situation, losing the opportunity to get a job is not rational because the majority of people cannot find this chance whatsoever. As far as I am concerned, if people do not use the opportunity to get an ordinary job, there is not a gurantee for them that they will find a better job in the future. For instance, my cousin studied in a high-ranked university in my country, but he has not find a permanent job after several years because the economic condition is not stable in my country. Consequently, I decided to accept any job opportunities that I find in my life because I am not sure that I can find a job in the future readily.
By way of conclusion, I strongly believe that people should not lose their job opportunities, and waste their time to find a better job. This is because not only do most of the decent jobs need several years of experince and they cannot to work in a great company suddenly but also most of people have difficulty to find a job in this terrible situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
Nowadays, most of people of the society attend the university an...
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Line 2, column 660, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... but I was not successful in that time. it is worth mentioning that I had a lot of...
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Line 2, column 775, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... so I started to work in a company that was not satisfying to solve my problems. After several yea...
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Line 2, column 852, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ms. After several years, I could find an opportunity to in a great company with h...
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Line 3, column 79, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Most
... is very low, especially in my country. most of the young people do not have a perma...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'found'.
Suggestion: found
...niversity in my country, but he has not find a permanent job after several years bec...
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Line 3, column 779, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that I find in my life because I am not sure that I can find a job in the future...
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Line 4, column 282, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...rk in a great company suddenly but also most of people have difficulty to find a job in this t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, as a matter of fact, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46234309623 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68744756846 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.407949790795 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0554615502 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.65 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256870138319 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093383668898 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728359994436 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185010267917 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352074394456 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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