Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Over the past few decades, the huge influence of education and attending the university have been revealed for most of the people of society. Students spend a lot of their time at universities and schools. In this regard, their parents think that their teachers have a critical effect on their opinions. Personally speaking, I, on the other hand, think that friends have more impact on an individual's behavior. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will elaborate in the following essay.
First of all, students spend most of their time with their friends, and it is incontrovertibly axiomatic that the more time an individual spends with someone, the more influence has that person on his actions. As a matter of fact, children do their homework with their friends, attend the school with them, have fun most of the time with their friends, to name but a few. As a consequence, an individual is effected by their friends since they spend a lot of time together. My life is a compelling example of this. When I was at university, I liked to listen to Persian pop music, but I was surrounded with people who their favorite music was American rap. In the beginning, I was not interested in that kind of music whatsoever. After several months, I was influenced with them and most of my favorite pieces of music were American rap music because I had spent a lot of time with them and we were listening to this kind of music most of the time.
Secondly, children can select their friends in freedom. Nobody forces them that you have to be friends with someone, or you should not make a connection with another. In this regard, most of the people opt for people who they like their behaviors and actions as friends. To be more specific, while we can not choose our parents or even our teachers, we have the right to select our friends and we imitate most of their gestures since we liked their gesture that we have selected them as our friends. Consequently, people are influence by their friends since they like their behavior. For instance, it is crystal clear that if an individual does not like the behavior of someone, he will not influenced by him. Most of the time people do not like the personality of their teachers. In contrast, it is more possible to be influenced by his friends since he make a connection with people who he is interested in their ideas.
In conclusion, the analysis of the aforementioned ideas brings us to the point that friends play a more significant role in students. This is because not only do they spend more time with their friends but also they have the freedom to select their own friends, so they opt people who like their people, and most of the time imitate their words or gestures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 390, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ink that friends have more impact on an individuals behavior. I feel this way for two main ...
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Line 3, column 691, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'influence'
Suggestion: influence
...ke the behavior of someone, he will not influenced by him. Most of the time people do not ...
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Line 3, column 855, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...o be influenced by his friends since he make a connection with people who he is inte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, as a matter of fact, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2245.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61934156379 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58912580938 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.405349794239 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6029431895 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.045454545 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0909090909 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287839035254 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102024481262 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744769196675 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199119134292 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.018912152608 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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