Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With this galloping rate in which science and technology are flourishing, an individual's relationship with his kins has changed dramatically. People do not visit their relatives frequently nowadays, and they prefer to use cellphones or the internet to keep on touch with them. When it comes to this point, some people have some debates as to whether the value of the extended family has decreased or not over the past few decades. Personally speaking, I think that the extended family is less important in comparison to the past. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will elaborate in the following essay.
First of all, people do spend less time with their extended family in comparison to the past. It is crystal clear that if someone is important for an individual, he would spend a large amount of time with him. People spend their leisure time with people who they really care about, like father, best friend, and girlfriend, to name butt a few. On the other hand, people do not like to spend time with people who are not important for them. For instance, people in my society used to visit all members of their family at the beginning of the new year. It was one of the most important traditions of my culture. However, people do not visit their relatives nowadays, and most of them just call their parents and siblings to say happy new year. If the extended family was important for people, they would find time to visit them.
Secondly, an individual wants to solve the problems of people who he really likes. Nowadays, people do not care about problems of their kins a lot. Therefore, we can conclude that an individual's relatives are not important to him anymore. To be more specific, one of the best ways that people can show that they care about someone is that he will do his best to tackle his problems. For example, people in the past were more willing to give money to their extended family members to solve their financial problems. These days, most of the people have to deal with what they have on their plates by their own since they are aware that they cannot rely on other's people help. As a consequence, it is incontrovertibly axiomatic that people care less about their extended family nowadays because they will not help their family members when they need other's people help.
By way of conclusion, the analysis of the aforementioned ideas brings us to the point that an individual has less emotion for his extended family over the past few decades. This is because not only does an individual spend less time with them but also he does not try to solve their problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ence and technology are flourishing, an individuals relationship with his kins has changed ...
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Line 1, column 337, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...is point, some people have some debates as to whether the value of the extended family has de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66956521739 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47848587842 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.417391304348 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1882247381 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6363636364 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9090909091 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15279433262 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659175335732 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539239659422 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117782713878 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316842064313 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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